Just Somethin Off Da Top My Head !!!!!!!!!!!

Pre Tense · September 9th, 2003, 01:52 AM

I can't seem to find my way in this lost soul of mine
No direction, no lines, no sense of perseption of time
These eyes can't define what I might relish to find
I just embelish this quest this is a question of mind
My cranium painfully aches when I wake
Every day somethin new that I have to embrace
My mistakes have me chasin these nightmare away
Still I pray to find peace before going astray
My bodies a robot thats programed to choose
I have no more choices it chooses to loose

Just somethin off da top a my head !!!!!!!!!!

PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~>

**noncentz** · September 9th, 2003, 02:36 AM

THAT WAS POWERFUL WELL COMPOSED AND EASY TO RELATE TO.ALSO TO SHORT LEFT ME HANGEN RIGHT WHEN I WAS GETTEN IN IT.RE WRITE ADDING MORE TO THIS DONT LEAVE MY CURIOSITY TO SEE MORE UN SERVED.STAY UP TWIN....................THNKS ON THE B~DAY WISHES IT MENT ALOT

Pre Tense · September 9th, 2003, 03:20 AM

REVISED

I can't seem to find my way in this lost soul of mine
No direction, no lines, no sense of perseption of time
These eyes can't define what I might relish to find
I just embelish this quest this is a question of mind
My cranium painfully aches when I wake
Every day somethin new that I have to embrace
My mistakes have me chasin these nightmare away
Still I pray to find peace before going astray
My bodies a robot thats programed to choose
I have no more choices it chooses to loose
Yet somethin inside me inclines me to move
And I carry myself like I carry a tune
Quick to the point with a rhyme so complex
To perplexed to react no one ever looks back
I'm relaxed when I pack all my heat in this bag full of verbs
I'm disturbed, it's absurd how I learned all these terms,
how I stir all these words that concure they're so pure
that I'm sure they will keep you at least they will please you
release you/
Now I can't go on aimlessly saying things dangerously changin the way
that I started this strange display
Now I fucked up can't find nothin more I can say
Go to bed I should say Fucked this up turned out gay
Blaaaa,Blaaaa, Blaaaa, Hey, Hey Hey
Time to sleep FUCKIN LATE

Sorry about that... I lost my train of thought.........
FUCKIT
PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~>

**FanTa ZeE** · September 9th, 2003, 01:23 PM

Hi can i just ask you ppl, when can i battle sum1 and how do i get onto battling, i am quite good nd i wanna battle sum1 2 see how i rank. N e suggestions??

sorry 4 being so thick but im a newcomer! lol
thanx in advance
and i thought that rap woz amazing, sum reely relative lyrics, respect.

tsheff112 · September 9th, 2003, 01:33 PM

Good spit and I did see where your train of thought got derailed, but good spit anyway. I like the vocab and the original piece, but that shit did leave me hanging. Keep that in your notebook and save it for some random moment of inspiration.

Hit up my shit "she's gone now." <- - -I could have done better, but whatever, it's my first drop.

Keep it comin. Laaate.

Alias-C · September 9th, 2003, 08:44 PM

hot, shit had flow man, decent vocab and a pretty good concept to it... shit didn't get me bored, it was kinda short, but it was good... would have been better if you had finished it though...
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**1STLAYDEE** · September 10th, 2003, 04:40 PM

I thought your format was good. I can tell alot about your personality by the way you wrote that. I also think you could have used that for other things on this site.