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    Downhill

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    It started at 13, before id never heard or never seen
    What I mean is, only spoken tales from family warning it’s a ravine
    That is, it starts with green, ya fall off and next thing amphetamines
    To Barbiturates and then opiates, tempting fate, the final gate
    I said “wait, why’d ya think id get sucked in im strong minded”
    Don’t follow the crowd, hate drugs and anywhere you’ll find it
    Already decided At 12 id say “no way, aint gonna get lead astray”
    “And that word is final”…

    Back to thirteen, a mementos year where it all started
    Entered high school, boy… Was I too open hearted!
    Literally the day I embarked it, I got my first sight
    One Friday night, we was drinking vodka and all up a height
    Some of the more hardcore boys rolled up to the shore
    We were on the rocks, they saw, came over with some hash
    Pulled it out, next we were mashed, red-eyed ive never looked back
    Never stopped if I got the cash, but still Id say “id never touch crack”
    Back to the weekend a couple of years have passed, still no progression
    Alcohol and herb possession is as far as it goes, I chose!
    Then arose the opportunity when fucked to have some speed
    “It’ll liven ya up bring ya back up, and I don’t deceive”!
    It pleased indeed it served the purpose, keeps ya going for hours
    Soon got into it surplus, next thing was acid, technicolor flowers
    Would trip emphatic like nuthin else the buzz is so rapid
    But there hard to get, next was the E’s the tablet of X
    The love pill, Wow! did they have an effect, the best yet
    Going out clubbing eyeing women loose living plenty giving
    Dancing all night, by now im 18 when I started these, and please!
    Don’t think junkie. Cos im now 23, that’s only half the picture
    The next fix-ture was cocaine, started snorting, slowly to the brain
    A subtle buzz, but once ya know it, cant refrain, but what it contains
    Is really to blame, cos the next step was ammonia a real phobia
    To control ya, to draw out the crack, smoke it to an instant relax
    Its heavy shit and highly addictive, there’s only one step further that’s smack..
    BUT…I aint into that!!!!
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    ya wordplay were off the chart, structure an fa'low were also pretty sweet. I like the 1st verse better than the rest. I liked reading it all though, keep it up peace........

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    thnx man....any moe....????...pZ..to all who reply...fuck the rest...lol
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    ..I really liked your content..your flow was good..your wordplay also good..overall nice piece..

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    Good length. The worplay was nice./ Ur verse rhymed well and flowed well. he me up if ya want to do a collabo sometimes....

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    Yeah this was good man....your structure was alright, some lines were kinda stretched out but it was ok, just watch the length....you had some good vocab.....flow was good in this, it stayed on point through out the piece....overall good piece....keep at it.

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    thnx ppl..noted and appreciated....any more bofore i start my latest conquest...pZ
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    come on ppl....no more?....
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    "It started at 13, before id never heard or never seen
    What I mean is, only spoken tales from family warning it’s a ravine
    That is, it starts with green, ya fall off and next thing amphetamines
    To Barbiturates and then opiates"...

    Very Strong start Deva...

    Ok...You were very discriptive...Nice story lay out...had me wanting to read more,, and I am guessing this really happen to you or something you went threw in life...Your flow was very on point...and vocab was very good,....It went with your scripts well..you choose the right words to use much props...


    DEVA I TOLD YOU BEFORE I WANT TO DO A COLLAB WITH YOU..PLEASE...


    Laters....

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    bio...Pm me for that collab...n. yes its my drug life up til now..pZ
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    Deva your Pm is too full....

    So when you get a chance pm me...

    I only have msn messenger...Just Pm when you get a chance...
    I already have an idea on the collab....

    Sorry for clougin up your thread...

    Laters..

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    yo i think this was nice u know...good structure....good vocab....lines were a bit long though....shorten dem and dis will be some hot damn piece

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