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well thanks for the feed appreciate the feed

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thanks people for the feed appreciate it very much

[Maven.]

The only shortcoming of this piece is that it takes a lot of very close reading to get what the hell is going on...well, to really understand what you're saying anyways. Or what I think you're saying. It's unbelievably dense...which is why it doesn't really work from a hip hop perspective, but from a written poetry/topical perspective it's lovely.

Your imagery is vivid. I espescially liked that. I also like the idea of having pictures in the middle of pieces...is that what they're doing in SS these days? So cool.
Also, the line with the fill in the blank was very creative.
It shows that you put quite a lot of work into this piece, and while the piece may be about vicious, enthralling love, which is not really an original topic, you presented it in an original way.
Nice work.

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thanks man your feed is greatly appreciated

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this is one of my favorite pieces...lol

watch this is gonna get closed..lol.
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