Damn Pak, I swear every new piece I read from you is just beautiful. This piece was very relaxing to read and deep. You flowed well and again your vocabulary was off the charts. I still think it would have been aot better with more complexed rhyme scheme but it was still a great read. Great structure and I see your also getting more comfortable with pictures. Love to see you improving. Keep writing man.
Thanks man, i appreciate the comments.
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
Last uppin for the day.
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
Last up then the piece can rest.
Kiss me through the camera lens.TNL
An amazing piece, very original, and a great topic, great use of rhymes, and the wording was great, the emotion in this piece was by far the thing that sprung out the most, from start to finish, it was incredible, great use of vocabulary, my favorite part....
So he walked away with a “Brother” who wore his hair in braids
An impulse resulted in a tragedy of rotting flesh aided by aids
That part right there really stood out to me as a very detailed description of life as a homosexual, you picked the right quotes after each verse, and the whole idea of your drop was great, very good drop man, good job.
If you could return the favor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...02#post4867002
thanks
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