The Life Of Me

[Dirty South]

nice OM here, I feel ya on the topic, i've been through a similar situation with a few of my family members....the emotion in this piece showed to me that this was a touchy topic and dawg I know it wasn't easy to write...you do need to elevate a little but this was still a hard piece...truly something that'll make you think about your own life and think about the things that have and could go wrong...Nice

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[SunSpit]

Thanks 4 da feed. N i hope u get/got thru wit wut happened in your fam. Uppin

[Sammy B]

Good emotion and the fact that it was a true story helped you tell it better. Just a couple things to improve the verse as a whole. Some lines were stretched a little and the structure was off in some lines would have to much detal on them, try to string out those details onto more lines it will help the flow too. Overall good drop highly emotional and a topic alot of people can relate to.

[southsideloco]

Nice drop, a good emotional piece. your vocab was rather basic but it still went nicely, the flow was also good except your lines kind of stretched a little too much makin the rhyme a little hard to follow, but it was still good no doubt, liked the emotion you put in it. all you can do is keep droppin and elevate. overall nice emotional drop, lookin forward to read some more.

[SunSpit]

Thanx ya'll. Uppin

[the_madhatter]

Well I liked it because the emotion is a plus on this piece. But while the emotion is displayed well, everything was kept at a basic level, which at times takes away from how it is suppose to come out. I think you could've came stronger with this, and since this is your life, I know you can. But I did like this nonetheless.

[MC Blasta]

yo ima just drop this shit quick wit notin censored 4 all u fakez dat uze goole for lyrics

I stand my ground lyrically bound,
To a mic on my right arm aimin 2 impound,
Then next lil bitch that wishes ta speed bye,
Wavin' fake gang signs like he simply wavin' hi,
It makes me sick that all these wannabes wanna try,
To testify, I DENY!
Access to my tireless trainin',
As I work on the stage, style drainin',
All the wanna B bitches frontin' tools,
Screamin' they lay the law make the rules,
Yet they need mad PRACTICE!
TRACK THIS!
I'am the one who drops knowledge in a rage like an angry sage,
Writin' confusin' chapters forcin' fakaz to turn the page,
You lock me in the cage, I JUST BUST YA GAUGE!
I've been work since tha youngest age
Kickin' continuous hotbeats and phat style,
YET YOUR IN THIEF DENIAL!
Walkin' tall yet stolen profile,
And now your in Hell's court, time for the trial,
Your turn to be tested and bested,
Like I was before I rested,
And took on the brothaz on the current rap scence,
Kickin' madd whackness yet clockin' madd green,
I'VE COME TO REIGN SUPREME!!!
Bring forth my lyrical dream team,
So don't forget to avoid the blink,
Stand wide-eyed and think,
Cause my gat reacts faster than your bat,
When its all over,
People will stand above and ask, who was that?
The insane mic rocka,
:drink: MC Blasta :drink:

[Aquiles]

^^^Aiight bro make your own thread...why you droppin in this one??? lol alright but anyway....

I was kinda feelin this piece.Your structure was good and your flow was pretty good. Your rhyme scheme was good. There were only a couple areas were it seemed like you forced a couple of rhymes but other than that it was good. Concept was great...

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