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Thread: Rap Created In 7 Days - the Journal of the Creator.

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    Rap Created In 7 Days - the Journal of the Creator.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=99624
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=99394
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97001

    Day 1, I lurked from the shadows lyrically
    Sprinkled a beat, and decreeded that the world shall vibe
    Cause all of a mind kind, will be lifted off there seat
    Emcees only spit about what they knew of
    Never bit, nor recycled - they were idols
    Ravishly, i listened to what I had created, and went to sleep.

    Day 2, I rose, i saw aprentices' and was finally satisfied
    There was no 'stab a bitch', just a lyrical gift
    I then created the flow of the movement
    I cyphered a rap, pulled out a mic, and was dissapointed
    It rhymed - but there was no internal rhyming
    I sighed, and went to sleep.

    Day 3, I rembered the past, and created "multis" at last~ *pause*
    I wrote up some lyrics, and the crowd was in awe,
    I was the only rapper they saw, so they wouldnt know wat to judge
    Again I was disapointed, so I revelaed my next plan
    To create another rapper - yes, "Man"
    He came from fan, to a future Emcee - then I slept.

    Day 4, Man was created, we squared off in a battle
    Hearts began to rattle, but - we both choked
    I hoped it would be the greatest thing seen
    But he came from a rap phene, to on the t.v screen
    He didnt know what he was doing, so I gave him lyrical powers
    He devoured the hours, and rapped.. I was satisfied and slept

    Day 5, I created the rap bible, the 10 rap-commandments
    Cats began to establish there ability, consoled skill more then me
    Rap became all Ganster, the old days were over
    I was dis-pleased at all these miss-deeds
    I ordered a mandatory council meeting
    They handed it tword me, and removed me from power.
    I didnt sleep that night.

    Day 6, The sacred rap manual was tworn up
    They had free will, and used it, scorn the name
    I was sickened by the fake thugs, and fake rappers
    It stackered daily, coming from suburbs claming hood
    Bothered me, so I made an underground rap decree
    The rejects,the gangsta,the real,my "family"
    I slept that night..

    Day 7, Rap has become commerical, accept for the underground
    It holds the same sound, yet more meaning
    Yet more deciving, you came from the boddom - the top
    Thats when niggas stopped reppin' they block
    Popped and opened the casket, I grabbed my mic ~ *pause*
    And slammed, and said "ALL FAKE WILL BE STATIC"
    I slept fine that night, because - rap was now saved..
    I then engraved the commandments, the underground is now established..

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    damn i liked this alot i never seen your work this is a first and i admit im impressed. every aspect was illness and i see great things in your future
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    thanks, any good criticsm coming from you is much appreciated..
    peace

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    upping

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    yeah i was feelin it.........creative way to express your topic too.....

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    thanks.. upp

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    Yeah i agree this was a good piece here....pretty creative at that...i liked it overall...it made a pretty good read i thought...vocab in this was good i thought....flow was alright....but overall this was a pretty good piece...keep at it.

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    upp peep this right here...
    then peep a diss i just dropped
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...&postid=999252

    ight holla peep this tho

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    youve got a unique flow and all your aspects are pretty well-done... the concept has been used before though, by Canibus... but u did it in a different style, and in a different way... you stayed on topic, so props

    7.5/10

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    yo i really liked this peice right there. its a good protrayal of the history of hip hop music with its rise and fall and ressurection of good hip hop in the underground scene. good idea. i like the sleep repition thing...very createve nice job.
    A h e U n c D e f I o r B w a L r d E

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    ohh my god...this is classic

    i dont think most of the guys above me caught the inner concept behind this..

    the evolution of rap and the MC...i must say this piece is a favorite of mine already

    legend? im gonna try

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    thanks man i appreciate the good replies

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    This wasn't legendary, was good though. Nicely written. Had a few minor flaws, lack of multi's, some awkward wording, writers voice wasn't that well directed at points .. decent read though.

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    thanks for the reply...

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    ...I like the creativity..you get props on that alone...overall it was well written..keep up...^^

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