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Thread: Nuclear Concept Presents: A True Nigga

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    Nuclear Concept Presents: A True Nigga

    I dont need anti-biotics to feel no pain/
    The shit I spit would make Maryln Manson look sane/
    Rap is like weed something I crave/
    It seems like every other nigga tries to put me in my grave/
    Im not afraid of death, if someone pulls the teck, I wont run/
    But thats why the only person I know is my self cuz I dont trust noone/
    Other rappers thinkin we cool, until I hit em with disses/
    Some niggas rat me out, but I got slugs snitches/
    Hopin someone would kill me before I got to them/
    But noone could fulfilll their wishes/
    I get hit with slugs but stay kickin/
    just for the simple pleasure of puttin the glock to the back of they heads an sayin, "Guess what, Im alive bitches!"/
    Some of you claimin to be gangsta or thugs, well I am and I know it/
    The way you rhyme sumtimes I have to think your a poet/
    But Im fine where I am cuz I dont have one insecurity/
    About my identity/
    Cuz I'll always stay true, even if one day I were to get the fame and wealth/
    I'll never be fake, cuz I'll always look in the mirror and be able to recognize my self/

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    2 short but other then that i like it maybe be more graphic
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback in or this will get deleted..

    But this was ok....kinda short like Word said...but your structure could use some work though...some of your lines were stretched out there, should try to shorten them up a bit, cause it took away from the flow in this....but just keep at it.

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    thx for the feedback.
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    it was a ight keystyle flow was good wordplay ight vocab ok multis and punches ok over all 7.2/10

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    AAAIght, not ill. Good basic verse structure, just lacked in vo cab and creativity. Keep it up son. Toner Rating 6.5/10

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