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    Pollution & Evolution

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    The end of evolution won’t come with time but pollution
    Retribution for killing the planet with toxic diffusion
    Our contribution has evolved with us over time
    Advancing minds advancing chemical, acid and alkaline’s
    Pumping poison into the atmosphere causing cancers
    And global warming drawing the tides higher no time for gangsters
    Too many cats busting raps on girls cars and grabbing flaps
    The worlds in relapse its losing the grasp, needs turned around
    The knowledge was found its profound why this shit still happens
    Evolution gives the ability to learn, creating new contraptions
    So do you really think it’s a good thing the way we’re going
    I’ll leave it open, you decide, and I’ll keep on hoping…..
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    good shit

    good flow and vocab

    good topic, u hit it hard

    keep this up man, i dont see why its being slept on

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    this was excellent work you displayed true talent but made it so short other then that you did excellent work here
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Yeah i agree this was a good drop here....everything seemed good i thought....Your structure was nice like usual....vocab in this was pretty good as well....flow was on point, stayed on through out it really...overall this was a good drop....keep at it.

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    This was a good artistic pz I knew exactly what your point was and where you were going with it. Very good imagery and I agree wit u one hundred percent. You have different line lengths wich causes the structure to take the flow down a notch (im not much better but you got to keep workin at it) So on a scale from one to ten you get an 8, -1 for structure, -1 for the shortness of the pz. Okay I'm out, post on hate-hate relationship for me. pz

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    decent dopic
    flow was good
    id like to see you do more with this topic

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    decent drop

    flow was on mostly

    multies felt forced at times

    vocab fluctuated

    good shit

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    this was A good Piece...had Nice strucure Like all His Other open Mics That I Have read...Ya Made it Nice and short It was a Relief because every one's else's Are Very Long...Ya flow was Nice because it stayed there constantly...I liked the Topic very origenal...Keep Flowing Kuz Peace (v)


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    it was ight u need to elevate on your punch lines and vocab wordplay was ok multis alright flow was alright just keep up at it

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    iight peice... Good wordplay and nice to see some Intelligence... overall i liked it... keep elevating.... on3...

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