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  1. #1

    Memphise

    I'm only down for MEM so come on bitch let me in
    I no how ta smoke that hay cuz I do it every day
    hit that blunt wit that chronic funk the supera snoics
    creepen in and out the cut all the real bitches no how ta suck
    so watch when ya her my flows cuz yo ears might explod
    flows comen from everywhere this boy maken niggas scared
    shooten em wit my mouth they don't no what I'm about
    repen for the dirty south
    memphis comen stright your way we bout ta make yo day
    letten niggas hear my flows
    letten everybody no when I come and take they Ho
    showin how pimpens done smoken blunts and haven fun
    hitten bitches from the back cuz I love ta hear they ass clap
    Ya'll no me so ya'll need ta respect me
    respect is what I gotta have
    so bitch back up yo maken me mad
    money isn't in my eyes and fame hasn't got me hypnotize
    so come run up on me if you dare
    cuz really hommie I don't care
    cuz I got frount line niggas every where
    Pimps and Playa no how I roll
    pimpen hos and smokne DRO
    we don't give a fuck what u think
    cuz you'll be the one fixen my sink
    so don't blink when we run up on ya
    hit u in the head so u can still be an organ dona
    and your bitch wishen I was hers
    cuz u aint shit but a neard and u no its obsurd
    cuz all u nigga aint shit and all u wanten my dick
    cuz I"m fucken your bitch every night maken her scream so loud its maken me look outta sight
    and u might think u can but u can't
    and u can take that to the bank
    cuz all u can be is a fake
    they all no I'm the only one
    so fuck yo if you dont feel me
    cuz I'm done


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    Last edited by Farse; December 4th, 2003 at 09:05 PM

  2. #2
    up..............

  3. #3
    Banned
    Join Date
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    This was alright....but you need to work on your structure a little bit though, try making your lines a little longer and the long ones short, and make them around the same length so its structured good....flow was ok, could have been better, add some multies and internals to help that out though...overall this was ok but just elevate...keep at it.

  4. #4
    uppen for more feed back

  5. #5
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    Join Date
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    Chicago
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    13
    nice but structure and flow need a bit of work
    "I'm withdrawn from crack so bad my blood itches
    I don't rap to get the women - fuck bitches
    Give me a fat slut that cooks and does dishes" - Eminem

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