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    Blood Sport

    “ We swear that we will take part in these Olympic Games
    in the true spirit of sportsmanship, and that we will
    respect and abide by the rules that govern them, for
    the glory of sport and the honor of our country.”



    Athens: The 2004 Olympic Games


    As the competitors jogged out, the Crowd Released
    A thunderous Sound Beneath the soft Clouds of Greece
    Astounding Athletes .. Smiled, Clapped and Cheered
    The stadium erupted .. Mild Laughter in their Air
    Past Years saw champions crowned, world record Times Set
    & now its time for them to shine as their Country’s Finest
    it Requires full concentration, a lean Physique and Style
    But that place on the podium makes all the Training Worth While
    To know you’ve competed & won medals among the Gods of Age
    and they Anticipate the Olympic Torch that’ll Start the Games
    .
    .
    .
    As the events were announced, you could see the Sweat on his Shirt
    His eyes looking to sky, and he was Desperate for First
    This was the moment he’d trained for, to be Privileged of Gold
    The beads of sweat Bungee Jumping from the Bridge in his Nose
    Feeling hopefull .. he isolated himself in Stretch four
    All that stood between him & first place was the Length of the Course
    Eighteen hundred meters straight sprint after the Starters Gun
    To win he knows he must perform at the Hardest he’s Run
    Adrenaline Pumping his Muscles as he Entered the Blocks
    Concentration at Breaking point, tryna Center his Thoughts
    “Set” was called .. the Moment Of Truth had Finally Arrived,
    but this Teenage Phenomenon had his Eyes set on the Prize
    of crossing the Finish Line first .. making 4th the Wonder Lane
    and with a final gun shot, the Race was now Underway
    He’d Heard It Late .. not the Greatest Break, but roughly even
    and Tied for fifth place with Urlah Tamovich of Sweden
    Every second now counted .. first bend Fastly Approaching
    .. The athlete from Uganda left a tight gap Vastly Open ..
    Our Sensation cut the inside .. now Pushing for Third Place
    His anatomy at full stretch .. and Rushing with Pace
    Arms flailing on the Straight .. this was his chance to Take The Lead
    His chance to pull ahead of the leading pack at Breaking Speed
    the Aching Knees didnt deter him .. he retained a Firm Focus
    Now in second place, but lookin toward the finish where His Hope Was
    Neck and Neck, the Swede & Czech as they reached the final bend,
    It was all down to determination, and who could go that extra length
    Could this break the record attempt? The audience Gasped at the Screens
    as the Czech Republic took first with a time of Four Fifteen
    Beating the record no one's managed the Last Ten Years
    with a standing ovation from the crowd as he Collapsed In Tears
    .
    .
    .
    Next Day, the Czech's Name was on the tabloid's Headline
    Beneath the exclusive "An Olympic Cheat: Fined!"
    He'd Declined to comment further, and so now as the Records State
    The gold medal was Awarded to the German in Second Place
    Scientists led various tests, found Traces in his Blood
    Indicating the Czech had used a Performance Enhancing Drug
    He was later Banned from the Sport, his track Career was Finished
    "Sure its the taking part that counts, but you only take Part To Win It
    I'd of shed Blood for this Sport, now i've a heavy Diss-Taste
    I guess my Competitive Edge proved my Biggest Mistake.
    A Living Great was something id always Aspired to Achieve
    I put my Blood and Sweat into this Sport, and thats what cost me.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95803
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95900
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95917
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...8&pagenumber=3
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95861

    Last edited by Maven.; December 2nd, 2003 at 04:22 PM

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    Nice story tellin here = ) ..concept well used..with some decent vocab , ..a nice flow, ..and up to date info , ..lol^

    The gold medal was Awarded to the German in Second Place
    Scientists led various tests, found Traces in his Blood
    Indicating the Czech had used a Performance Enhancing Drug
    He was later Banned from the Sport, his track Career was Finished
    "Sure its the taking part that counts, but you only take Part To Win It
    I'd of shed Blood for this Sport, now i've a heavy Diss-Taste
    I guess my Competitive Edge proved my Biggest Mistake.


    Nice read, interesting topic = )

    But follow rules, 3 names/links to open mics u replyed to else this wil be deleted..

    Have a nice day..
    Last edited by Edicius; December 2nd, 2003 at 02:51 PM

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    cam you can really write welll,
    being able to go to any topic aqnd place the reader there is a hell of talent.....you used great scheme and discriptive reference...
    complexity switching to simple and fallowed on topic sequence.....this was a really good read.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Wordness.
    It looks better when centered, like that it looks fucking horrible.
    But yeah .. i'll find my three links later. I reply to heaps of stuff in here anyways, its just usually as an alias .. = )

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    that was a tight drop, you always come ill on open mics though you bastered lol

    it was amazing how well you stayed onto the topic and actually gave us real info great way to do a topic also your vocab was really good very good drop keep it up man

    if ye got time could you hit up my battle it's in my sig...thanks
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    Arrite.

    Edicius - check your PM's before you close this for having no links you cunt!

    Dont worry hoe = )

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    iller than yall: wait right there
    pitchblackprism: lol
    iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95803
    iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95900
    iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95917
    iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...8&pagenumber=3
    iller than yall: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=95861
    pitchblackprism: what?
    iller than yall: ^ links to open mics i replied to

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    well, this was a good read, but it lacked the usual large amount of wordplay and metas that you usually have.

    the nicest part of this was it's storytelling.

    The use of the pledge as the introduction was effective and would make a good voiceover for an audio.

    The race was described pretty well, but what I couldn't figure out was "awarded to the german in second" wasn't the swede in second? its madness!

    I liked the soft clouds of Greece.
    the sound of it makes me sleepy. LoL
    not bad my man.
    wordperfect?
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    i thought this was ill,your story tellin is off the hook.and it had good flow and decend verbals.

    keep that shit up

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    Yeah, Maven .. this was the rough copy i posted up, edited a few of the misspellings etc, on the one at RnR it does say 'Swede' in second ; )

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    Deff Good Shit Here.. The Story Tellin Kept Me Hooked
    On The Story n' Kept Me Reading It..

    Imagery Was Great

    The beads of sweat Bungee Jumping from the Bridge in his Nose
    ^^ And that Was What I Was Tlkin About
    Great SHit, Wordplay Coulda Helped It But
    Overall, It Was An Enjoyable Read.
    Artificial Intelligence.

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    This Was Dope Cam. The Story Tellin' Was Absolutely Incredible. You Had Plenty Of Multi's In This Piece, And When Used, They Were Great. Flow Was Smooth Throughout, Adding To The Dopeness Of This Piece. The Story Tellin' Is What Put This Piece Over The Top Tho, As Did The Vivid Details.

    The beads of sweat Bungee Jumping from the Bridge in his Nose
    ^^ Fantastic Detail. .

    A Living Great was something id always Aspired to Achieve
    I put my Blood and Sweat into this Sport, and thats what cost me
    ^^ Great Way To End It.

    Your Ability To Take A Topic Like This And Turn It Into A Dope Piece Is Amazing. I Commend You For That. I Thoroughly Enjoyed The Read. . Keep Droppin Cam.

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    hmmm interesting topic to pick the name of this made me want to read it cause i like bloody gruesome things nice flowing conept multie flowed well together in each line your consistancy was thoro and very well thought out ..holla ...8/10

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    ^ Haha .. this wasnt my topic, its from the RnR topical league .. topic was 'Blood Sport' .. just tried to steer away from the whole 'Van Damme' theme to it .. came up w. this

    I'll reply to your pieces when i get home later ..

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    yeah that was tight for sure never heard any flow about that

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