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    We All Human

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    Yo time out, ya'll need to calm that stuff down
    And that's the double truth ruth
    As Samuel L said in "Doin' the Right Thing"
    Racist people stating biggotest thing
    Everyone's afraid of anyone
    Some people laugh like coppin on heritage is fun
    When it comes to me racist ideas stop and are done
    African American, Caucasion, more than different
    Ancestors come from different worlds,
    but both struggle to pay the rent
    I take that back, hate cause the similarities to lack
    People that talk power for white or black,
    Leads obsessed minds to be wack
    Tense hatred leads to fights and riots
    This leads to the gun you feel you have to buy it
    Racial slurs, Don't make sense like retards who stutter and speak in slurs
    People always remember what we were
    Flying high the confederate flag,
    no wonder the American flag is beginning to sag
    We can't forget about the rest,
    it's what makes America the best
    It's the mixing kettle of the many American
    Asian, Korean, Italian, Egyptian, Native American,
    Indian,Puerto Rican and Mexican,
    WE ALL AMERICAN, IF NOT WE ALL HUMAN
    PZ AND LUV

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    Some people laugh like coppin on heritage is fun
    When it comes to me racist ideas stop and are done
    ^^^nice line^^^

    The piece itself was good, but could of been made better,
    you need to use more vocabulary, and wordplay.

    And your structure needs a little help, you kept most lines the same length, but sum were more than a few words over.

    nice topic, and i liked the title, thought it was gonna be better than it was.

    6/10

    aiight

    no hate

    peace


    and please check out 'breakin' by myself and white lightning.

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    Yeah this was alright i thought....your structure needs a little work though, try making the lines around the same length so its structured right....the flow was alright in this, try adding some multies and internals to help it out though....vocab in this was ok, could be up'd though...but overall this was alright...keep at it.

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    Coudl have been executed better with a better flow, ..some ok worpdlay , but didnt feel this that much , ..keep writin , ..= )

    And follow rules, ..3 names/links to open mics u replyed on , else this will be deleted..
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    thanx for the responses I thought that this pz needed to be written even though it wasn't the best i'm tired of hate ya herd and people makin stupid ass jokes about race no matter who they talkin about pz and luv

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