*SiC & TiR'D* (something quik)

[Rant]

LIKE I SAID...NOTHIN GREAT SOMETHING QUIK....


chorus*
im tired of hearin all this shit
i did wat i did, so i dont even wanna hear it
its done and over i quit 2 clear it
im not scared of u, so ur bullshit.. y fear it




all bullshit all of thoze fuckers should die
man they say im a player all them worse then i
everybody sees this but the ppl who need-2
they flirt and talk bad bout u went they dont see-u
im there 2 compare wats true or juss unfair
caution alerts me b4 theze punks juss try and hurt-me
im tired and its somethin that ive been stuck 2 deal-wit
im held back,i get bullshit im gonna die,i can feel it
they was piss'd so they blew dis out of preportion
this drama cuz of me,wish i was a patient 2 a child abortion
it sickning,the pain they be inflictin,still complainin and contridicting
i think there scared,might not be big but im a threat
i bet i can piss them off,and mabe scare them 2 sweat
cuz they havent liked me since da day we met
u think u won, shit this shit aint even settl'd yet
how can u tell me im forbiddin from the two
i got shit on u, fuck if only u knew
man u and ur life ur definetly not charming
wen they come 2 me, u better have seen it coming cuz it wont be alarming
tellin me who 2 date and who i cant see-no-more
they're urs now but once they see they wont be-no-more
i laugh at u, cuz wat u say doesnt even make sense
ur a fake, and ur nothin special, but thats juss my 2 cents
u kno ur fuck'd wen im wit ur chix more then YOU
ya i dont care bout u or wat u say u gonna do
ur juss plain old bullshit and needs 2 go 2 hell
i see wat ya do, and i know exactly who 2 tell
but i aint gonna play ur game and be like u
u wanna fight me, wow feel proud, cuz id probably fight u 2
id lose but id prove 2 u im not scared of a pussy like u
say wat u want and hear wat u want cuz im gettin out
its 2 hard 2 keeping seeing and hearing things i already know about
id sell my thoughts so i can forget my past
cuz i have pain 2 hurt me that will 4ever last
watever life is not perfect in ne ways specially 4 me
i quit its done,i scribble it out and want it over all becuz i want it 2 be


chorus*
i walk away wit nothin but relief
cuz i kno shit they wont even believe
leave get of my dick u both ass-holes
if i was u and seen them..id juss pass-thoze
im sick and tired of wat everbody thinks they know
all they do is lecture me wen i got nothin 2 show

[KeyMo Thera P]

hmm your rhyme scheme could use a little more work but the topic made sense and you were consistant with the topic and i could relate to alot of the things u were saying in the flow.. just elevate your rhyme scheme ...throw some multies in the mutha fucca and i think you'd be doing some good justice to open mic

[noncentz]

keyo that was a solid interpritation of constructiv critisizm and accurate.
just elivate yourseolfmore read your work and see if you cxan alterate anyof it to more complex and better dlivery style rapping.

[Mistral]

You need to leave your 3 names or 3 links of people you left feedback in or this will get deleted...

But this was alright man...structure could use a bit of work but it was alright, just try making your lines around the same length and it will be better....your chorus was alright i thought.....flow in this was good overall as well.....overall this was alright...keep at it.

[Maven.]

Originally posted by Masta C
You need to leave your 3 names or 3 links of people you left feedback in or this will get deleted...
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word, reply to three open mics, and post links to your replies in this thread or it gets deleted.
thanks.