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    Tragedy Struck

    Song: Tragedy Struck

    INTRO: I walked with you....

    CHORUS:

    Im not afraid to say that Gods got a plan for me [All I know (Ive signed with you)]
    but its twisted and torn with the pain of tragedy [all ive seen (Ill die with you)]
    and the loss of close ones makes it hurt much more [all I do (I've tried with you)]
    Its sad to see you go I dont wanna let go [reflections of you (I've cried with you)]


    VERSE 1: RehaB

    The last thing on my mind was death on my way to church
    but God had his hands at work a plan to help or a plan to hurt
    I'm not sure but at that moment we were hit by a drunk driver
    blindsided and realizing at that time I thought my brother was flying
    when really it was me I was flung from the accidents debree
    and I watched as the weight of the two cars crushed my family
    and at fifteen years old I was suddenly catupolted into action
    grabbin my dads arm and gaspin for breath away from the gases
    but the seatbelt was fastened so I smashed in the glasses
    and grabbed it to snap it but I could'nt keep up the traction
    I slipped and fell saddened I could'nt rescue the passengers
    and after minutes and drastic work I watched the gasses burn
    I saw my dad he turned and mouthed the words that forever stayed
    it was meant to be this way God has a plan for you just pray
    and when that car came my way you know I prayed that fatal day
    when my angel saved me from the embrace of heavens gates

    CHORUS:

    VERSE 2: Fonetic

    10-26-02, thats when my wonderful life came crashing down
    A smile that was once there switched into a frown
    Remember that day like it was yesterday
    Was outside in gym class laughin and began to play
    Then I heard I was checkin out, thought to myself why now
    Then silently to myself in my own tears I began to drown
    Then it struck me like a 1,000lbs were dropped upon my mind
    I knew my grandfather days of resting had ended this time
    a man I so looked up and idolized
    God took him away, but to a better place than this life
    Suffered from cancer of the esophagus and spine
    At his viewing I wished I could of just hit rewind
    the tears swelled up and fell just as I saw the coffin
    Later that night I got no sleep, stayed up tossin
    Wishin that God was playing a trick on me and this was a dream
    But then I saw the light and began to see

    CHORUS:

    VERSE 3: THe LAst PRophet

    OUTRO:


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95297
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94245
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...=&postid=946402

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    but I hate this shit Im sick of songs about surround sound systems
    I have to see these bitches with bling the size of midgets


    RehaB

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    YO WUS^ REHAB, THIS WAS A GOOD PIECE FOR A BEGINER.
    VOCAB COULD USE SOME ELEVATING BUT IT WAS OK, FLOW WAS GOOD, MULTIS WERE AIGHT, OVERALL A 6.5/10.

    AND YA IM FROM PORT SAINT LUCIE, DO YOU LIVE IN OR AROUND THERE. PEACE

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    OH FORGOT TO SAY THAT I THUOGHT THE CONCEPT WAS REAL DEEP. THE CONCEPT WAS GOOD.

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    yeah ths concept was tight.......executed ok....but could have been better...quite limited vocab....but overall not bad....keep elevatin.....pZ
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    Tite shit for a beginner ....... good concept had multis and can elevate

    7/10

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    lol im not a beginner but thanx any ways everyone...obviously this was a collab and the first verse was mine the second was not...

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    but I hate this shit Im sick of songs about surround sound systems
    I have to see these bitches with bling the size of midgets


    RehaB

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    pretty good... concept was ight kinda played
    Flow was straight multis was tight

    7.5/10

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