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    a lil sum'n

    this shit aint luck this shit is destiny//
    i got dat touch plus da recipe//
    a dutch plus da best of weed, brings out da best in me//
    ya'll desperately hop cock tryna ride on my dick//
    but first u need a permit//
    and then imma let da sperm drip str8 off ya lip//
    words dat i spit is all ripped up uniquelly//
    ya'll actors aint a factor wut makes u think u can beat me//
    i'll eat theee alive you guys is all bitch//
    cuz i can fuck u up and leave dat asshole stiched//
    rip u down till u look like confedee//
    ask around its obvious ya dudes wasn't ready//
    machede with the chainsaw flow//
    cuz i cut the track like my brains on blow//
    stains on clothes like Tony Montana in the bathtub//
    bring it from the bottom to bitches givin me back rubs//
    thats thug plus im that ghetto nigga from v-town//
    throw up the first shot and catch my own rebound//
    i see clowns far from the circus//
    clame to be down but wen beefs round a bitch comes to the surface//
    niggas is nervous, im all bout balls of steel//
    cuz everyday i pray like its my last meal//
    cuz everyday i prey on niggas dats not real//
    talk about heat wen niggas aint got steel//
    the fact is shits a classic wen ever i speak//
    cuz i can drop hot shit from both of my cheeks//
    rest at the peak of rap cuz im known to be sick//
    where as ya'll like daireah from the mouth, all u do is talk shit//
    i walk it so i can gain my respect//
    why hitchu wit a pitsol wen i can kill u wit text//
    im smart about my ways how i keep shit on the low//
    cuz quiet niggas kill and loud niggas talk shit about shit they don't know//
    thats that dumbness quick to make ya feel da numbness//
    body on the ground with no head to be found u dumb bitch...

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    None of the concepts expressed in the piece were really outstanding, but the use of a good flow and many multis helped your overall verse. lol @ Tonya Montana line, got a slight smile out of me. . This was alright, just try to get more creative with your ideas, and keep writing.

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    Reply to 3 open mics, and post it in here , follow the rules if u fail to do that this tread will be deleted..

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