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Thread: In Too Deep. . *Dope*

  1. #1
    Formula
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    Corrupted Visions: In Too Deep. . *Dope*

    Door slamming is heard. A Voice says Lay Down, Your Next Visit Is In Two Days Springs from a bed is heard.

    Fuck Man. . . I Was In Too Deep. . . .


    My Rights Revoked, Shit Causes Me To Sigh And Choke
    I Lied About Coke, Cause I Don't Wanna Die Or Be Broke
    Tryin This Smoke, Gettin By On A Hundred Every Few Days
    News Say, The Brusies Of A Life Bout To End In A Cool Way
    These Chains On My Feet, Allow Me To Be, Nuthin More Than A Worker
    Wife With A Kid On The Way, Keep The Pain At Bay, Try Not Ta Hurt Her
    Hard To Survive, Red In Parts Of My Eye, High Can't Subside
    I Try Ta Provide, Enough Paper To Find Wifey Food For My Seed
    Mood Movin With Deeds, Rocks On The Block Cause I Need
    The Green, I Strive For N Ride More, To Deal This Shit Quick
    Parents Sayin I Got No Dick, But I'm Bustin My Ass For A Fix
    Caught In The Mix, Bought Every Fuckin Thing I Could
    Sell Good, So When My Son Is Born We Outta Tha Hood
    Paid For Protection, So I Carry Heat To Leave Beef In Stretchers
    But I Just Want Perfection, Life And Order Need Connection
    Don't Need This Stress N, Cops Is Runnin Checks N Leavin Me Guessin

    [Chorus]
    Tryna Make A Livin But Peoples Is Givin Me Shit
    Sinnin With Bricks, I'm Jus Tryna Get Me Some Chips
    I'm Working Fucking Hard, Strugglin To Make Ends Meet
    Make Wins Peak, But Sins Creep, Am I In Too Deep?

    It's Like God Had It Out For Me, Done Had A Bout With Disease
    I'm Beggin Please As I Smoke These Trees And Fall On Knees
    End This Sufferin', Get Me Somethin, Don't Leave Me With Nothin'
    Don't Lead Me With Bluffin, Really I Don't Need Any Frontin
    Believe Me Cousin, I'm Buzzin' With My Life Lookin At Labor
    Family Callin' Me A Traitor, Sayin' I'm A Fuckin Drug Blazer
    With Emotions Goin Up N Down Like Elevators. . .
    I'm Needin This Non-Sense To Stop
    I Got Sense To Pop Shit If My Mu'Fuckin Money Flops
    Then My Honey Drops, Sweat Beads Runnin Down Her Head
    God Tests G's I See, I'm Restless As Wifey Lay Up In The Bed
    My Pockets Full Of Dough, I Can Buy That Crib
    Buy The Toys For My Kid, And Provide A Nice Life To Live
    Baby Bought To Come Out, Cops Runnin' In With Guns Out
    My Son's Out, Wife Cryin As Cuffs Like My Hands Now
    Hands Down, They Busted Me For Hustlin' Weed On The Street
    These Mu'Fuckas Only See Green And Don't Realize. .
    I Was Jus Tryna Get What I Need

    [Chorus]

    Now I'm Lookin At My Wife N Son Behind A Stained Glass
    The Pain Lasts, Forever And A Day, Cryin With Chains On My Ass
    I Put My Hand Up But Can't Touch, Only See A Tear In My Baby's Eye
    Daddy Why? It's Drivin Me Crazy To See My Lady Try
    To Hold It Together, I Tell Her This Is Jus Some Bad Weather
    Tell my Son, Pops Is Clever N I Won't Be Locked Up Forever
    My Time Is Up, I Blow A Kiss, Reminice Then Hit My Cell
    Think To Myself, I Got Enough Stashed To Get My Ass Out On Bail
    But Oh Girl Ain't Tell, She Spent That Money Cause She Was Hungry
    So I'ma Stuck G, Locked Down With Cops Now, I Pray Every Sunday
    Get Me Outta This Shit, It's A Fuckin Crime To Wanna Provde For My People?
    I'm Writin Rhymes Equal To Kineval, Words Lethal, My Lifes Evil
    Devil's Over Took Me, No Longer A Rookie, I See What I Need To
    Tell Wifey I Need To See You, Cause My Heart Hurts So Much--
    That One Touch Will Cause It To Bleed Through
    Mom N Dad Have Fully Turned Their Backs So It's Support I Lack. . I Think
    That This Is The Fact, God Put Me On My Back Cause I Was In Too Deep

    Damn. . .

    -Formula
    Last edited by Formula; November 26th, 2003 at 11:59 PM

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    LM (Feat. Double-O Seven)- Hate Comes To You
    Auspicious- Forever
    Defend- Want To Be Free

    I Kno This Shit Is Long. . But Fuck, It's Standard. 3 Verses, 16 Lines A Piece. Read It. . Review It. . W/E You want.

    -Formula.

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    Ey dat was some real deep shit. I liked everything about it. The chorus and all. I wish more people drop shit like dis
    End of all game you have chosen ya path.

    Now you too can be a victom of DocDizzie's Wrath

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    that was a deep piece....it was a good Read....i'll give ya 8/10 for it


    Aiight Peace Out Kuz

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    Yo This Was HOTT!!!!... You got a Deep Mind about you....

    Stay Up ,,,,


    check this one out
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=94738
    "oNlY gOd CaN jUdGe mE"...........

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    This Was A Very Good Piece Here.. The Multis In It
    Were Well Planned With The Flow And Structure Mix.
    The Story Was On Point With Your Lyrics. Good Story
    Line Also. The Flow Was To The Point Where It Worked
    And Didn't Lose The Reader Cuz You Were Tryin
    To Hard, So That Was Dope.. Overall This Was A Good
    Piece Bro.. Just Keep Steppin Everything Up
    Artificial Intelligence.

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    Yeah i agree this was a good piece man....You structured this very nicely....I liked your multies, they were all over in the piece, i liked that lol...flow was real nice in this like most of your pieces are, stayed on point, didnt get off....Overall this was a good piece, made a good read..Keep at it and keep dropping.

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    Formula
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    Word Up, Thanks For The Feed So Far, Really Appreciate It. And Masta. . When I Write My Tracks N Shit, Flow Is What I'm Concerned About The Most. . That's Why They All Maintain The Flow Throughout Even If The Rest Of The Piece Sucks.

    -Formula.

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