WK3: Exalted vs Desmond Hume (Exalted wins)

[Bag Mandela]

WK3

Punches due: Tuesday 2nd September

Voting ends: Friday 5th September

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@Exalted. @Desmond Hume

[Exalted.]

Check

[Desmond Hume]

Word

[Desmond Hume]

i swear i feel like Holyfield... Ex boxer with an ear to the ground for flips quips & mics wit the worst rhymes....
And real deal? - your shit belonged on run of the mills lane and DQ'd when Spree caught you bitin the first time

[Exalted.]

Bag sold the order.. put ur fate in my hands & a soul to torture
The last date w/ Des Tinny sounds like it'll be frequencies picked up on ghost recorders

[Lady Poet]

DH isn't bad had a nice ending
Exaited ending creative compare to DH
vote Exaited

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DH isn't bad had a nice ending
Exaited ending creative compare to DH
vote Exaited

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DH isn't bad had a nice ending
Exaited ending creative compare to DH
vote Exaited

[MV]

I have to ask . Flips, quips and mics? Like Mick or Mc? Someone confirm this is a British ting. your punch was a personal but I didn’t see any angles or wps. It was a very straight forward jab. Exalted was pretty dope here. The concept was a bit of a reach but the payoff for letting that slide was worth it. Good stuff
V/exalted

[B0Z0]

V/ Exalted.

Desmound Hume.
I really like the Boxing concept, although I feel the execution was lacking - I think you messed up with the Flips, quips & mic part. This is a Mike Tyson reference, setting up the punch quite well if rewritten. Also, the Mills Lane part is subtle but doesn't really fit. Again, I think it could be great if rewritten and more obvious that he was the Ref who DQ'd Mike Tyson in the Holyfield fight. The personal was decent; the setup let you down and meant this didn't really land. Shame.

Exalted
I like the concept of this and a cleaner punch overall.

[Blas]

ok personal from hume with not much of a flip but it's ok, exalted i liked the wp and think it was cool

v/exalted

[plethora]

I've been around for a minute & seen many holyfield/Tyson biting references so hurts your punchline. Exalted had a bar that read nicely

V/ Exalted

[Slayerr.]

Yeah I think I may have missed something in des bar either that or he’s missed his haymaker, personal was strong if true and I’m hurt ex is a biter because I’ve always rated his stuff, ex came nice, I’ve seen better from him mind but enough for the w
V/ex

[Desmond Hume]

Next time I will include a link, and I'm definitely reaching back in time with all the Tyson vs. Holyfield references for sure. @Slayerr.

Thanks for the votes and feed.

[All Seeing Eye]

I am voting Desmond Hume because his username is Desmond Hume.

V/Desmond Hume

[Wordz AhGod.]

both had decent concepts but odd execution. I felt like Exalted had an ok attempt but I'm not sure what's up with the Tinny or how the frequency comes into play here to connect the whole thing. Desmonds bar was more personal but I don't know if it is true since I've been gone, his issue is that he made his bar needlessly long and a lot of it didn't really matter as it didn't setup for the punch at all to me. In the end I think Desmond barely had the better bar though.

v/Desmond Hummus

[FaQEyeReddit]

I v exhalted this time.. I liked the flow and rhyme scheme.. I also thought his punch was snappier