WK37: HMM(RD1) HdotVerseman vs Spree (SPREE WINS)

[miracle]

Regular Battle
Punches due NO DUE DATES
Voting ends on NO DUE DATES

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1 bar(2lines) vs 1 bar(2lines)



You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.

first to 4 wins
3-0 is a KO
@H Dot Verseman @Spree

[Spree]

Check

[H Dot Verseman]

check

[H Dot Verseman]

I'll even edit your draft cuz you need it...
But when I put a red dot on your i's it's not cuz I'm proof reading

[Spree]

Listen faggot…
You stay acting like a girl, we just hope suicide is one of your means
We get it… you Transverse, we just pray you hang yourself from those type of beams

[bare ryu]

verse this was a solid bar, not many complaints except the angle isnt as personal or unique. i feel like ive seen a number of autocorrect/proofreading bars with similar angles

spree this was also a clean bar, nice personal touch to it as well. a bit more direct because of the nameflip

mvgt - spree

[Slayerr.]

Pretty dope battle here I liked the dotting your eyes flip however I/eyes is a bit basic but liked the red dot like teacher marking your work I hit think sprees trans beams had more going for it
V/spree

[H Dot Verseman]

Okay I concede HAHAH

Now- the transverse nonsense- what are you even talking about. It's so poorly written you don't even end rhyme a single syllable lol. "one of your means, those type of beams" LMFAO

We need a rhyming boot camp on this site so badly

[miracle]

Dude.. u did a eyes/i’s wordplay

[H Dot Verseman]

that's one part of it.....

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must be a lot of steel workers in here appreciating non rhyming transverse beam lines

[ItsBav]

I'm actually on the fence with both bars here.

Both a little simplistic to be honest (not hating or starting drama etc.. I'm not with that shit)... The red dot/ crossing i's seemed to land a little harder and was a little cleaner overall in execution and delivery.

I could see this going either way though, both are pretty much close in terms of skill. Best of luck to whoever wins.

[H Dot Verseman]

^ I already conceded- and no, this is not me

[ItsBav]

Conceded? After two votes? Bruh... lol

[Chree]

that's one part of it.....

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must be a lot of steel workers in here appreciating non rhyming transverse beam lines

LOL

[Lady Poet]

Both Punchline illy
I felt like spree punchline more complexity Compare Dot

vote-Spree