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    Keystyle...of a thought..

    Replied to- Wordperfect, Masta C, and MC Synical

    Does death take you into another world
    Or does it just transer guys into girls
    Vise versa, crazy but it'sa hard question
    That people take for granted not a blesson

    I've questioned death plenty of times through out my youth
    Striving to become to my full potential an fit in a certine group
    Restorted dreams an lack of blood making me feel unorthidox
    From lack of oxygen to my lungs creatin a dam of air stocks
    Choking preparing to vanish as if i was never even created
    A child born into the mist soon to be elavated or evaperated
    Stocking bliss, to counter attack my question of what death is
    Is it a thurst that never quenches that lingers in'a mutant fizz
    Father was never there mother tryed to support the beast
    Of her son going beyond her capibilities an angel set in the east
    Crying at night scared of what may happen to her precious thug
    Who's determind to find deaths answer or find love for a slug
    Frustration and preperation clashing together lezbians n straights
    Realistic angels who were sent to guide people into lords fate
    A path with pebbles im'a soldier with no shoes an it hurts
    Lingering thoughts of how to get there suicide seems to work
    If i die dont cry cause I will soon find my answer in the rest
    Of my demies, graveyards are full of treasure chests
    For they no the answer of reincarnation of jesus an god
    Maybe are thoughts are wrong maybe we go beyond
    Who's to tell the exodus of life when we dont understand
    Blood in my veins leakin out my eyes to create a mortal man
    Invasion of instincs focusing me on the upper hand
    Nobody knows what happens after death so watch yaself bleed
    Until your day in the casket be thankful for the air you breath
    Soft Focus
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    This was a good read. .It was mediocre. .It would have been better if the lines flowed better. .like matching up the sylables better. .There wasnt really any quotables. .yet no wack lines. .I hope you get the flow sorted bro. .

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    alright i'll work on that man..an thankd for the input
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    uppen
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    UPPEN!!!...damn
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    I thought this was a good piece...it was a good read as stated before....your vocab was nicely done....flow was off a bit though, but still a good read none the less...structured it fine i thought...you ended it pretty well i thought....overall it was a good piece...keep at it..and keep dropping.

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    TIGHT PEACE TWIN A LITTLEW TOUCH UP IS ALL IT NEEDS
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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