Week 4: The Villain. (0-0) vs Viral (0-0) [The Villain. wins but booted for not voting]

[Fresh]

Punches due by THURSDAY NOV 30th @ 11:59PM
Voting closes SUNDAY DEC 3rd, 11:59PM

Check Ins
If you can't check in then there's something wrong w/ you
I won't be penalizing for not checking in though. Just make sure you drop a bar

No Shows
1 no show gets you taken out of the "in" roster. You will have to sign back in the next week
2 no shows gets you taken out of the "in" roster for 2 weeks
3 no shows gets you booted from the league for the rest of the season

Voting
Everyone is required to vote on 5 BATTLES MINIMUM. CONTENDERS AND CHAMP BEING MANDATORY
1 vote deduction for every battle link missed
Failure to vote at all will result in a boot from the league for 1 week
If your opponent no shows, you must vote on the required minimum to get the win

Battle Rules
In the event of a 3-way, each battler must drop 2 bars; 1 for each opponent
Battler must drop a bar to get a win, even if their opponent no shows/doesn't check
NO EXTENSIONS. It's only 1 bar
NO editing punches after opponent drops
Biting will result in a league/site ban
Recycling will result in DQ 1st time and League Ban 2nd time

@The Villain.
@Viral

[Soule]

I'm battling the man in the mirror, remembering '09 crystal clear, you must be heaven sent.
Villain vs Viral must be a joke cuz I'm fighting a ghost, but with two HOF's, I made that name relevant.

Explanation: I went by the name Viral back in 2009 and got some of my first OM Hall of Fames.

[OG Maestro]

I hope I battle you next week or something. you stinking ass bastard

[Fresh]

The Villain. Wins open for feed.

[Fresh]

expos are always a big no no. If you can't write a bar tht explains itself then you should move on to a new concept. Wasn't feeling this at all. And now it's got me wondering if Viral is another account you made lmao

[plethora]

This bar was more of a statement than a punch

[Joe Boston]

Agree more of a statementish bar.

[Soule]

I would've granted an extension, but whatever, y'all can sign me out.

[Zunto]

I would've granted an extension, but whatever, y'all can sign me out.

Nah stay in


This would have been a good topical stanza

You have the right idea and I appreciate that you’re trying to use your wits. But you are also trying to do way too much in one bar. Rather than trying to incorporate 5 different things in one bar, use 1-2 and connect them in a simple way with crisp wording. Wanna know how? Refer to my 1-2 battle sir

[Spree]

I would've granted an extension, but whatever, y'all can sign me out.

Lmao... you know where the sign in/out thread is...

[Krucial Th1rt3en]

Agree more of a statementish bar.

agreed. bar wasnt a punch. unless i missed sometihng

[Requiem]

Sometimes a punch can really work even as a statement like this pretty much was. I thought it was well crafted and had some good thought to it but just didn’t hit that hard because there was more to it than we know of.

[KnowP]

Didn't feel the bar at all here. Comparing yourself is coo for a set up but not a punch line. Gotta finish harder I'm.

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