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Bomb Bard
Krucial th1rt3en
10 lines due Monday night
Can't post till tomorrow
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Krucial Thirteen
Krucial th1rt3en
FUK wat yuh Networth! Tek bursts prove dude a weakling
I'm bout to champ W/Front Lines... U wish sum one could write a verse for U to beat me!
On ur comeback? U dumb wack! Ppl know this mans gay
Vs Spitzo u left an empty space between each bar...Voters'll leave them the same way!
Ur Gun bars is fake shit! Fukin rapist! Watch bomb rip a lame
When I say Fuck, Bitch Th1rt3en! I ain't talk'n bout how this Krucial dick get laid!
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
Bomb punches be fire... S'why I lace'em W/welts
FL on the GROUND,Champ! & I'll put u 6 feet under that for thinkin bout takin the belt
he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'.
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'.
Dead
Krucial Thirteen
Krucial Thirteen
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
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he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
+1 krucial th1rt3en
up...
Krucial Thirteen
Krucial thirteen easily won this! His punches were perfectly executed matched with great rhymes.
Bombards had basic rhymes like weakling, beat me? gay and way is real basic.
he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'.
he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'.
i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'.
he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'.
Vs
Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)
+1 krucial th1rt3en
"FUK wat yuh Networth! Tek bursts prove dude a weakling
I'm bout to champ W/Front Lines... U wish sum one could write a verse for U to beat me!"
This was weak!
"On ur comeback? U dumb wack! Ppl know this mans gay
Vs Spitzo u left an empty space between each bar...Voters'll leave them the same way!"
First half is weak, second half you got a decent punch in.
"Ur Gun bars is fake shit! Fukin rapist! Watch bomb rip a lame
When I say Fuck, Bitch Th1rt3en! I ain't talk'n bout how this Krucial dick get laid!"
You got another decent punch in, but this bar is the same quality as the last bar: first half weak, second half saved it.
"Punches rockin yuh brain! Yuh record screams nothin but lame
This a Krucial beating! It's important I get ur loss column to live up to ur name!(13)"
This was an okay bar, its a tier above all the previous ones. Its got a good punchline, the first half works with the second. This bar shined, but again its just okay.
"Bomb punches be fire... S'why I lace'em W/welts
FL on the GROUND,Champ! & I'll put u 6 feet under that for thinkin bout takin the belt"
I'm missing some context here or something, cuz at first glance this bar looks way too basic. So I don't see this one shine. Nice multi syllables, but they didn't have much effect. Not much of a diss here.
Overall I'm barely feeling this verse.
vs.
"he talking all that Smoke, but aint nothing Fire that he said,
thinks he's good......'Twisted Metal', this 'Clowns' only 'Fire in his head'."
That was a nice punch, actually made me laugh. Nice opener
"he prolonged the battle a day after he announced the shit.....
now im 'Amped', ill pine/'alpine Box' em, i know he 'Shook by the Sound of it'."
i had to look up what you meant by Alpine box... hey that was nice, took a jab at him in the first half, and damn it made the "amped" wordplay in the second line work. This is a good bar.
"i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'."
I'm not sure what you meant by reaching for him, but that second line was almost a reach. It's nice wordplay and works with the idea of the first half, and the whole bar looks nice at first glance. But the Ego/Arrogance meanings could've been better executed. This bar passes though.
"i Sharp Shoot, youll know were to find evil watchin me paralyze people,
'Pin Point' accuracy, i take a 'Cleaner Shot' than 'Sterilized Needle'."
That's solid for a gun bar, your verse has been consistently skillful so far. No direct diss here though.
"he holds 2 Titles, but all i see in your verseis excessive ramblings,
fuck awards, i 'AM' (a.m) 'Eating your Food', this a 'Breakfast of Champions'."
Alright back to dissing...That "i AM (a.m)" part is a bit of a reach in pronouncing it... The concept was good, but it lacked good execution. Bar was just okay, wordplay was good, this bar wasn't hardhitting.
Yo...I'm voting Krucial on this one.
"Don't you have something better to do with your time?"
"i gotta reach for u, cuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against,
im 'Cocky', bcuz this 'Ego'/Eagle sends flying whatever it air against/'arrogance'."
I'm not sure what you meant by reaching for him, but that second line was almost a reach. It's nice wordplay and works with the idea of the first half, and the whole bar looks nice at first glance. But the Ego/Arrogance meanings could've been better executed. This bar passes though.
it was a blatant reach, thats what i meant by 'i got a reach for u, bcuz your pen is too trash for me to be fair against'.
just showing i can do a bit of everything.
i think alot of URL battlers reach, and i try em out sometime lol
i appreciate the feedback bro, really means alot, glad u fucked with my shit
Krucial Thirteen
Bomb not one good bar I seen better battles from you
Kruical took punchlines, opener, & wordplay
Vote. Kruical for a better verse
Krucial verse is nice
Punchlines connected better compare to bomb
I felt like bomb verse lacking of punches so I don't like it
Vote does not count as she doesn't know how to explain anything she ever votes on
-Staff
Last edited by Spree; December 2nd, 2017 at 11:27 AM
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