Fixed.Originally Posted by Dia
Fixed.
lol.
yo @Donald Trump
did I PM you?
nah, but dont worry youre good. the more i think about it the shittier the idea seems lol
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also @Kill Spree every battle / open mic i go into has negative feedback. you got some A holes on this site... very discouraging to new members tbh
I don't see any negative feedback in OM. I see people trying to help others get better.
funny, you literally left this as feedback to a battle in your section
I'd give you better feedback and some hints on how to get better but the last time I did that you ignored everything I said and you're still dropping the same shit. No punches, just statements. With wording that makes shit barely make sense. With a lack of multies so it's hard to even read because it's boring. Start listening or quit battling dude because you're not gonna get better if you don't take the advice given to you.
LOL, first off the ego. "I Dont text battle, so let me give you advice on how to battle.. even thiough i refuse to battle because i dont know how to. Oh you didnt listen to me the dude who doesnt battle? then you should quit"
Pretty sure that was in an FL battle, not my section.
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and that vote was a couple battles after I left this vote...
Okay, I'm going to try and help you. So this is the most feedback I'll probably ever give in a text battle. First of all, your structure. The first line is normally meant to be the set up line. So the ideal is to make sure it has something to do with the second line, including the rhyme. Example:
Quote Originally Posted by Born To Kill
Whippin out abuse you'll envy, my shit violates and takes ya pride...
Bringin 8 inches of pain for Kenny, since each fist is about 4” wide.
Notice how the second line picked up what the first line was building up? You don't want to have a bar that doesn't come together or hold any coherence otherwise it'll just make no sense and fall short. The second thing is, your rhyme scheme. Your first two bars didn't even rhyme man. You need to structure that shit out.
AAAAB
AAAAB
If you feel confident, get some multies in there. Just make sure if you include multies, they have to make sense. Can really shoot yourself in the foot if the wording makes no sense for the sake of a rhyme. Try working on your wording too. Polish it up a bit. You don't want it to be really stretched out and you also don't want it to come off as rambling. My best advice would be to find the LLL/Lethal Lyricist League in the archived league forum. Go to the office subforum and find the LLL Hall of Fame Battles. Read up on some of those and get a clearer idea. It'll do wonders for you if you actually take it in.
most of the votes are trash tbh, i battle under alises all the time and dudes tell me im trash, then i battle on this name and everything is fire. shits crazy
is Dia in our crew? ......
I'm a depressed happy cunt. Don't fuck with me. I love you, but I'm crazy.[/I]
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I'll have a talk with them
Gone
No.
naaaahhh, im just talking shit. pay me no mind
why would i be in your crew.
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SWING AND A MISS.
LOL
This site has gotten more entertaining as of late... crews formed...albeit useless as they are.... I might feel like deflating some egos soon....
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