24 Lines
Recycle Battle
Due Friday
@Letterman
Fresh
Letterman
24 Lines
Recycle Battle
Due Friday
@Letterman
Last edited by Amen; December 21st, 2015 at 08:31 AM Reason: Fixing Prefix
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I’m set to thrash dude quick, I’ll have him runnin on some Forrest Gump shit
And no matter how much you try n jazz ya verse up just know I’m sure to trumpet
You're not dope or even near, one punch'll Cave in ya chest
n WTF do u stalactite when it's been proven you can't hang w/ the best?
Recycling battle lmao ur famous n' it's blatant
I'd Triad all the times you've done it, but I'd get charged with a gang affiliation
This a clear body, I'll put ur moral support in question
The way I've got the drop on this fool will rival Chinese water torture methods
Caught so many bodies I gotta keep a tally, the list is massive too
If ur ever considered top notch, s'cos I haven't killed the guy thats in line after u
ur not dope or sick u clown, ppl hopin they could drown when this lame spouts
If you plan on stickin a round... make sure it's into a revolver to blow ur fkn brains out
u’re as stingy in life as u are w/ ur bars, ur attempts aren’t even valiant, it’s funny
So if my punches can’t make him budge, it s’cos this bums got as much talent as money
ur a slut when it comes to reusing old shit, ur nothin to be worshipped
If we ever let this horrendous, its death by shock after readin one of ya horrible verses
You’re a sight for sore eyes, I want my fist to breach ya face
One punch’ll leave this Beast Mowed… n it's funny cause you'll never reach that state
Rob me? Don't bank on it cos I'll snatch ya watch wallet and shoes
and when I demand your Piñata comply or have ya insides strewn across the room
Ya girl's an ugly slut, keep that shit to urself n please just hide her
If we introduced his horticulture... she'd let EVERYONE plant their seeds inside her
Piece of shit, ur world is crumbling around u I’m surprised u haven’t crashed yet
So when aerosol u have left I’ll apply Pressure to ya chest and Draw Out ya last breath
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@Letterman
You filthy fuck. No girl would give you face, but they'd give yours jabs
Cuz the last time a chick put hermits on you, the clinic diagnosed her with crabs
He gets drunk & reveals himself. Seducing men's a fuckin habit
So his actions while swallowing genitalia that he's a dick sucking faggot
U can fight? That won't help, I'll leave you broken as fuck
But he's prolly thinking he's safe.. until a couple combos open him up
You get no play from your bitch & you fold. The game I spit is like gold
Cuz minesweeper off her feet, yours just push the wrong buttons & make her explode
Ain't bout the life this bitch claim. I draw the weapon - BIG CHANGE
So when you see fresh sweating under arms, it aint pit stains
Bro got a farmersonly.com chick. A stable relationship was all he hoped
He thinks she's the greatest of all time...but that bitch just looks & smells like a goat
Crazy if you think you won. U invested time in being my stock propellor
So if you're banking on a win, then you must be out of your Rockefeller
You're filthy but to your Voldemort built bitch, hygiene is no issue
Cuz you probably give that hogwarts everytime she Slytherin bed with you
I get wasted, turn up the club, pour liquor on bitches for kinks
He just spills cocktails, when he's gossiping about his boyfriend over fruity drinks
You're a biter, but your dreams of making it big aren't doubted here
The way this catfish for concepts, MTV could do a whole show 'bout your career
Your chick has a secret sex life. I'd say more but it'd leave you in scorn
Here's a hentai made a movie with your girl, while you were jacking off to that porn
We both beat your girl. I do it in bed, while Fresh takes the fight route
It's ironic cuz I breaker box, but he'll be the one to blow up & knock her lights out
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@Letterman - 1st post removed per your request. - AMEN
Last edited by Amen; October 17th, 2015 at 02:58 PM
OK, I'm new here so I don't know how much importance you put on flow and structure here in regular battles.
Either way I think both writers should really tighten up the wording and linelenght.
With that said it was an entertaining battle.. Fresh, good mix of punces and statements, overall some neat plays and funny bars. Some was a bit simple but there's plenty of clever concepts here also. I particulary liked that Chinese water torture flip, that was nice and sinister, and the first bar was a solid opener as well. So besides from in my opinion overly stretched lines this was a strong battle-verse. Letterman, funny opening bars, the goat line was too although it's a played concept. The rest was basically personal jabs with varying degree of success. Like fresh, I think some of the lines are way too stretched, maybe it's a site-thing but I think having concise wording is important regardless. Anywayz, a funny battle but vote fresh for having the most creative attacks.
So slept on smh...
Originally Posted by Fresh
Well, for such a lengthy verse of old lines. I can tell some where honestly old from back way when. A lot of lettermans seemed light or missing a few words to make them harsh. Fresh had a lot of lines I liked its just some of his wordplay attempts were ehh. Letterman had the worst misses out of the two. I think fresh takes this one, not really sure how to judge a recycle battle since its not aimed at your opponent persay just generics. Although I feel fresh had the better bars that landed.
v/ Fresh
Upping this myself
this is weird
theres a lot of stuff i seen before in here
but idk if i shpould be deductuong points cuz this is spose to be a recycle battle
so i didnt
just went off wording/execution basically
havent counted quotes or anythung
feel like let had morebut idk
fresh had some simple execution mistakes
ok so quotes/ok/misses it was
fresh 7/2/3
Let 7/3/2
ok so same quotes but fresh had an extra miss
fresh had lotb tho so idk.
pinata was tough.
its super close imo.
and i hate to do this bcuz fresh got the other votes.
this battle will never close idk what u guys were thinking putting 24 lines in fl anyway lol
anyway like i said since this is super close i gotta go with gut
gut told me i had let
cool read
v/ cbjbkd er whatever
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Fresh: gang affiliation, Chinese torture methods, stickin around.. Beast mowed..
Vs
letterman: crabs, safe, minesweeper, hog warts, mtv..
Vote: letterman.. This was a meh battle for it being evolved around recycling.. I saw some cool punches & concepts from both.. And some wtf bars from both.. All in all I got letter with one more quote
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[QUOTE=Fresh;8762919]I’m set to thrash dude quick, I’ll have him runnin on some Forrest Gump shit
And no matter how much you try n jazz ya verse up just know I’m sure to trumpet
I like the word play, but the punch didnt hit hard
You're not dope or even near, one punch'll Cave in ya chest
n WTF do u stalactite when it's been proven you can't hang w/ the best?
Ok, assume this was a personal.. again decent word play punch just didnt hit hard
Recycling battle lmao ur famous n' it's blatant
I'd Triad all the times you've done it, but I'd get charged with a gang affiliation
This one was the opposite, the punch hit pretty decent but the word play was hella forced. Ok line
This a clear body, I'll put ur moral support in question
The way I've got the drop on this fool will rival Chinese water torture methods
Pretty cool word play here i liked it, again lacking on that direct hit
Caught so many bodies I gotta keep a tally, the list is massive too
If ur ever considered top notch, s'cos I haven't killed the guy thats in line after u
Wordplay was eh, nothing special. But nothing directly at dude.
ur not dope or sick u clown, ppl hopin they could drown when this lame spouts
If you plan on stickin a round... make sure it's into a revolver to blow ur fkn brains out
Line was a bit stretched, the word play was ok, punch grazed his cheek
u’re as stingy in life as u are w/ ur bars, ur attempts aren’t even valiant, it’s funny
So if my punches can’t make him budge, it s’cos this bums got as much talent as money
Decent punch. I see what you were getting at
ur a slut when it comes to reusing old shit, ur nothin to be worshipped
If we ever let this horrendous, its death by shock after readin one of ya horrible verses
This one was kinda funny. Ok line
You’re a sight for sore eyes, I want my fist to breach ya face
One punch’ll leave this Beast Mowed… n it's funny cause you'll never reach that state
Forced word play a little but cool concept
Rob me? Don't bank on it cos I'll snatch ya watch wallet and shoes
and when I demand your Piñata comply or have ya insides strewn across the room
Nah this was garbage
Ya girl's an ugly slut, keep that shit to urself n please just hide her
If we introduced his horticulture... she'd let EVERYONE plant their seeds inside her
Lmao. Decent. Wordplay was eh but the punch hit
Piece of shit, ur world is crumbling around u I’m surprised u haven’t crashed yet
So when aerosol u have left I’ll apply Pressure to ya chest and Draw Out ya last breath
Word play was forced, punch missed him didnt like this line
Overall bro your pretty decent with the word play, you gotta work on your wording a little bit cause some of your shit was forced but overall good concept. Being its a recycle battle some of this shit is played out. All i gotta say is keep it up you got potential but need to work on coming more direct. You left so many punches short, you could have hit him hard but lacked on coming directly at him. Work on the wording. Decent verse.
Vs
Ok so this verse in my opinion was alright. Your world play was cool at times but a little forced. Some of this shit is played out, but honestly overall i think you hit decent on the punches.. you were more direct.
Overall this was a close battle kinda had a hard decision on who the winner was cause you guys were toe to toe... fresh you had him on the worldplay, but lacked on the punches.. and letterman you had him on the punches but lacked more on the wordplay.. being that this is a battle and punches are what win it... ima have to go with letterman
V/ letterman by a hair... just for coming more direct.
@Tim... Its 3-2 letterman.
I'll vote on this tonight
You're not dope or even near, one punch'll Cave in ya chest
n WTF do u stalactite when it's been proven you can't hang w/ the best?
Recycling battle lmao ur famous n' it's blatant
I'd Triad all the times you've done it, but I'd get charged with a gang affiliation
This a clear body, I'll put ur moral support in question
The way I've got the drop on this fool will rival Chinese water torture methods
Caught so many bodies I gotta keep a tally, the list is massive too
If ur ever considered top notch, s'cos I haven't killed the guy thats in line after u
Ya girl's an ugly slut, keep that shit to urself n please just hide her
If we introduced his horticulture... she'd let EVERYONE plant their seeds inside her
Piece of shit, ur world is crumbling around u I’m surprised u haven’t crashed yet
So when aerosol u have left I’ll apply Pressure to ya chest and Draw Out ya last breath
vs.
You filthy fuck. No girl would give you face, but they'd give yours jabs
Cuz the last time a chick put hermits on you, the clinic diagnosed her with crabs
U can fight? That won't help, I'll leave you broken as fuck
But he's prolly thinking he's safe.. until a couple combos open him up
You get no play from your bitch & you fold. The game I spit is like gold
Cuz minesweeper off her feet, yours just push the wrong buttons & make her explode
Ain't bout the life this bitch claim. I draw the weapon - BIG CHANGE
So when you see fresh sweating under arms, it aint pit stains
Bro got a farmersonly.com chick. A stable relationship was all he hoped
He thinks she's the greatest of all time...but that bitch just looks & smells like a goat
Lol Letterman had some good shit, and I remember a lot of them so he def knows what the crowd liked.
Either way, Letterman had bigger hits, but Fresh had much better consistency. some of Lett's shit had me looking like wtfffff. Fresh did too, but his solid jab list is much larger and more effective, i could have quoted his first "hor/whore" wordplay but i only quoted one cause it wasn't necessary honestly. decent battle, I liked this.
Vote: Fresh
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You're not dope or even near, one punch'll Cave in ya chest
n WTF do u stalactite when it's been proven you can't hang w/ the best?
Recycling battle lmao ur famous n' it's blatant
I'd Triad all the times you've done it, but I'd get charged with a gang affiliation
This a clear body, I'll put ur moral support in question
The way I've got the drop on this fool will rival Chinese water torture methods
Caught so many bodies I gotta keep a tally, the list is massive too
If ur ever considered top notch, s'cos I haven't killed the guy thats in line after u
Ya girl's an ugly slut, keep that shit to urself n please just hide her
If we introduced his horticulture... she'd let EVERYONE plant their seeds inside her
Piece of shit, ur world is crumbling around u I’m surprised u haven’t crashed yet
So when aerosol u have left I’ll apply Pressure to ya chest and Draw Out ya last breath
vs.
You filthy fuck. No girl would give you face, but they'd give yours jabs
Cuz the last time a chick put hermits on you, the clinic diagnosed her with crabs
U can fight? That won't help, I'll leave you broken as fuck
But he's prolly thinking he's safe.. until a couple combos open him up
You get no play from your bitch & you fold. The game I spit is like gold
Cuz minesweeper off her feet, yours just push the wrong buttons & make her explode
Ain't bout the life this bitch claim. I draw the weapon - BIG CHANGE
So when you see fresh sweating under arms, it aint pit stains
Bro got a farmersonly.com chick. A stable relationship was all he hoped
He thinks she's the greatest of all time...but that bitch just looks & smells like a goat
Lol Letterman had some good shit, and I remember a lot of them so he def knows what the crowd liked.
Either way, Letterman had bigger hits, but Fresh had much better consistency. some of Lett's shit had me looking like wtfffff. Fresh did too, but his solid jab list is much larger and more effective, i could have quoted his first "hor/whore" wordplay but i only quoted one cause it wasn't necessary honestly. decent battle, I liked this.
Vote: Fresh
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