Fresh vs Plata o Plomo [Fresh wins]

[Fresh]

10 lines
due in 24 hours

g'luck
@Plata o Plomo

[puravida]

check

[Spree]

48hrs for links yall

[puravida]

U trying to be a prince and ur fam helps ya follow the step of young will,
but honestly that does NOT make it okay to let ya uncle phil.
thank God we aint family, I don't need any of that trouble.
you there hopin' you pureblood but truth is you're a damn muggle.
I sense you're getting cold feet or that you fear your life now.
cuz da sweeper get close to ur face and like zamboni machines..will clear your eyes out
tryna get a reference from me, you should know and look close
when my boot up in ya face, it's the only time i'll leave some footnotes.
u have no proof that ur out this world, and don't act like ur storming
only time fresh flow was a big deal, was NASA confirming water in mars this morning

[Fresh]

His gimmick is the worst n he's been livin it since birth
I'd put Money on Holes bein put thru you, Dividend ur curse
ur kid is the worst, teach him how Not to be such a Goof
if he ever get out of hand w/ me, s'cos I tossed him across a fuckin room
Your weird as shit n the hands u ain't got, this man's not loco
n' we know platypus cause he makes duck faces in every family photo
I'm on my bully shit, 38 is fully clipped n' readers bout to witness some brutal shit
I'll turn ur whole world upside down, snatch ya wallet n chains- that's business as usual kid
ur a sheisty cat n it's no doubt the pussy u get has an adjacent crack
So if we hold u at face value, lets just hope it's not the face u have

[Fresh]

http://rapbattles.com/showthread.php...open-for-votes
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[Spree]

@Plata o Plomo
2 links sir

[puravida]

http://rapbattles.com/showthread.php...OPEN-FOR-VOTES

http://rapbattles.com/showthread.php...4)OPEN-4-VOTES

[Clout]

U trying to be a prince and ur fam helps ya follow the step of young will,
but honestly that does NOT make it okay to let ya uncle phil.
I like the idea you have, just terribly worded.
thank God we aint family, I don't need any of that trouble.
you there hopin' you pureblood but truth is you're a damn muggle.
Harry potter? Not really liking this verse from you so far, mate.
I sense you're getting cold feet or that you fear your life now.
cuz da sweeper get close to ur face and like zamboni machines..will clear your eyes out
wording needs to be better, but this is ok
tryna get a reference from me, you should know and look close
when my boot up in ya face, it's the only time i'll leave some footnotes.
Your set up was very underwhelming & the punch isn't harsh enough. You did have good synchronizing of wordplay references from set up to the punch, its just not a harsh one.
u have no proof that ur out this world, and don't act like ur storming
only time fresh flow was a big deal, was NASA confirming water in mars this morning

You're very jabby with you punches. All you honestly need to improve on? is making your bars hit harder with a harsher impact.

His gimmick is the worst n he's been livin it since birth
I'd put Money on Holes bein put thru you, Dividend ur curse
Eh
ur kid is the worst, teach him how Not to be such a Goof
if he ever get out of hand w/ me, s'cos I tossed him across a fuckin room
LOL, I like this punch. Its not heavy but I like how you flipped this. Wasn't expecting the punch to roll that way.
Your weird as shit n the hands u ain't got, this man's not loco
n' we know platypus cause he makes duck faces in every family photo
Seen the platypus flip on him before, but this is ok.
I'm on my bully shit, 38 is fully clipped n' readers bout to witness some brutal shit
I'll turn ur whole world upside down, snatch ya wallet n chains- that's business as usual kid
not a big fan of this approach
ur a sheisty cat n it's no doubt the pussy u get has an adjacent crack
So if we hold u at face value, lets just hope it's not the face u have

lol, ok


I have fresh winning, he had more lands & what landed? hit harder. Plata you're very inconsistent; you either have an ehh verse or a pretty solid showing. Fresh had this problem when I first started battling he improved a lot. He wins more than he loses now and has some big names under his belt. I think wording & concepts if the main issue that plagues you, Plata. Fresh you did alright here, I have seen better. You have a funky way of using slant rhymes. I wish you'd back away from them.

v/Fresh

[Lenox]

Plat: uncle phil

vs

fresh: toss across room, family photo, face u have..

vote: felt plat improving a little bit, again his bars fell flat due to execution.
i was def feeling uncle phil tho.. felt fresh just has a lot more experience and it showed this battle, fresh got this

[A. Diction]

U trying to be a prince and ur fam helps ya follow the step of young will,
but honestly that does NOT make it okay to let ya uncle phil.
--- I like the concept and the flip but I didn't like the wording. Execution was lacking.......
thank God we aint family, I don't need any of that trouble.
you there hopin' you pureblood but truth is you're a damn muggle.
--- no.............
I sense you're getting cold feet or that you fear your life now.
cuz da sweeper get close to ur face and like zamboni machines..will clear your eyes out
--- meh, wording is weird, why u put the simile first lol.............
tryna get a reference from me, you should know and look close
when my boot up in ya face, it's the only time i'll leave some footnotes.
--- I don't like how ur structuring ur lines, anyway this is played..............
u have no proof that ur out this world, and don't act like ur storming
only time fresh flow was a big deal, was NASA confirming water in mars this morning
--- lol aite................


Vs.


His gimmick is the worst n he's been livin it since birth
I'd put Money on Holes bein put thru you, Dividend ur curse
--- not really feeling this, I mean I wanna like it cuz its clever but it doesn't really work.............
ur kid is the worst, teach him how Not to be such a Goof
if he ever get out of hand w/ me, s'cos I tossed him across a fuckin room
--- played, but OK...............
Your weird as shit n the hands u ain't got, this man's not loco
n' we know platypus cause he makes duck faces in every family photo
--- lol aite..............
I'm on my bully shit, 38 is fully clipped n' readers bout to witness some brutal shit
I'll turn ur whole world upside down, snatch ya wallet n chains- that's business as usual kid
--- ehh...............
ur a sheisty cat n it's no doubt the pussy u get has an adjacent crack
So if we hold u at face value, lets just hope it's not the face u have
--- face value is played but I likes the flip, it was lulz.................


Overall: I got fresh with an overall better verse here. I don't like how plata is structuring his punches, the wording is weird...if u fix that tho I think you'll be aite cuz u got the idea of how to write a battle verse. Just stay away from played concepts and flip ur line a couple times before deciding on which one to use.

V. @Fresh

[KnowP]

U trying to be a prince and ur fam helps ya follow the step of young will,
but honestly that does NOT make it okay to let ya uncle phil.
u have no proof that ur out this world, and don't act like ur storming
only time fresh flow was a big deal, was NASA confirming water in mars this morning


vs


ur kid is the worst, teach him how Not to be such a Goof
if he ever get out of hand w/ me, s'cos I tossed him across a fuckin room
Your weird as shit n the hands u ain't got, this man's not loco
n' we know platypus cause he makes duck faces in every family photo



better battle from plata thus far. you gettin better bruh. fresh barely skates by with this win with his closer. too close for you dog. but good battle tho.

v. fresh

[Rock girl]

Overall-Fresh
Flow-Fresh
Punchlines-Fresh
closer- Fresh
concepts-Fresh
wordplay- Fresh
Both sound good to me Fresh punchlines hit harder than Plata.

vote- Fresh

[Fresh]

@Killing Spree thats a KO

[Tim]

Fresh wins via 4-0 ko