Packed Graves vs Letterman [PG wins 5-0]

[Packed Graves]

4-0 close this casket, chump.

[Packed Graves]

@Odd Ways @Smog @Joe Boston @Blanco. @Father Muff @KnowP @miracle @Persist

[Packed Graves]

@BROKE LESNAR this needs your vote.

[Wordz AhGod.]

Simba proves your pussy, now he'll die from a deadly right
Lion Kings a movie kids look up to & il make sure yours can do that every night
could have been better.

vs

nothing

this battle didn't live up to the hype.. bunch of corny ass wordplays, some false personal and weak lines. Nothing got me hyped here. Lion king lines was cool though.

v/PG

smh

[alphadog]

devalue & the value? faggit tell the truth your bars are bad
cuz if you consider that wordplay, then Floyd Mayweathers a Harvard grad
^^^
Nice opener PG sucker punch lol

Simba proves your pussy, now he'll die from a deadly right
Lion Kings a movie kids look up to & il make sure yours can do that every night
^^^
I see wat ya did here nice work

those tough axel get you buried, but dam your whack clown
a few fist will show how quick Manifold with out having a mechanic background
^^^
I got u on this one, could of been worded better tho nice similes

Letts concepts never work out, I ??? what's wrong with them
helping his bars is a deadlift that could put Greedy in the worlds strongest men
^^^
Decent

your not built for this, 40 wins nothing to show- that's sad fucko
not saying he can't hold up, but it's proven youll crack under pressure like bad stuco
^^^
Alri personal

your bars are Odd an the voters can trust this boy is weak
he tried to Drive Ways, out of the frontlines & ended up ruined like an Oil Leak
^^^
Wording needs a polish, solid punch Imo

you'll be sleeping with fishes after this mean servin
cuz if you want this Manta rays a threat, he'll be swimming with Steve Erwin
^^^
Nice wp here man

made it to the big screen, off wack bars- your killin it, g
an those jokes will get you put in a Box, Troll.. that parents won't want children to see
^^^
Nice wp but he don't troll lol

girls laugh at this shrimp dick, claim they need better eyes
so it's not about making the text larger when bitches complain bout letter size
^^^
Lol i thought this was dope and funny
Btw was better eyes (betta rise)?

your concepts are jailed & what you accomplished isn't hard
Letts fought so long to get a warden battles, i thought he was a full time prison guard
^^^
Decent funny punch lol

Pg was nice in this battle, switched through different styles and was on point with mostly all his bars,

Vs

This dude's a bum. I'll come to your residence to spark shit
& The way I ramshackle make him finally upgrade to an apartment
^^^ i see wat ur doin here, idk if u pulled it off tho tbh

Your girl said your dick is small AF & mine is trumping it
So when she still lies in your bed every night...she's just tryna boost your confidence
^^^ lol ur better than this man, seems basic

You wanna play? I got weapons that'll make him quake fear
Everyone will say damn you went Ham, let...when they see PG tryna Shakespeare
^^^ not feeling this one man no connections

He's right. Your 1st sentence was cocky but u came as boring as it gets
But the bottom line is...shit idk, I really fell asleep halfway through that shit
^^^
Lol nice

Your bars are relative to boredom, so that quote was true man
Cuz if sleep is the cousin of death, your verses must host the family reunion
^^^
Dope lol loved this bar

A pizza line? Well you aint topping my shit, there's no need to examine
Cuz if that line is food for thought, we must be preparing for a year long famine
^^^
Eh dunno bout this one

His mom didnt birth that huge head & his dad never claimed son
He was just hoping that your mothership you back to the UFO you came from
^^^
I liked the approach but execution failed

You're too wack to battle so much. You not making any friends, b
The way you rampages of wack bars onto the site, I'm surprised voters haven't gone into frenzy
^^^
Nice wp tho sounds forced

Your wack verses make us angry. Because of you, NC thinks we're just clowns
I'm just saying you aura negative impact to the site, cuz you're just bringing us down
^^^
Eh very wordy and comes across weak Imo

the best thing you ever wrote. It's agreed by anyone feeding your spits
Your verses are a sight for sore eyes, so we're definitely down for blind votes after reading your shit
^^^
Nice closer not hard hard hitting enough


Ok so yeah, you two really came with it, not as dope as i thought it could've been but its up there, some references i got some i didn't but what can you do, yas did ur thing, imo
Packed graves takes this by a slim squeeze with more creativity and effort

Vote PG

[Fresh]

Leaving this open @BROKE LESNAR 's request.

[BROKE LESNAR]

Packed Graves

devalue & the value? faggit tell the truth your bars are bad
cuz if you consider that wordplay, then Floyd Mayweathers a Harvard grad

10/10

Enjoyable personal. The setup did a stellar job of building the concept up. The lead-in to the punchline itself continued with that trend and assisted the misdirect

Simba proves your pussy, now he'll die from a deadly right
Lion Kings a movie kids look up to & il make sure yours can do that every night

10/10

Fresh spin on a dated reference. I typically shy away from deducting points for cliched references and concepts as long as they are flipped in a manner that appeals to me. This was a great way to use the "Young Simba" label to your advantage.

Those tough axel get you buried, but dam your whack clown
a few fist will show how quick Manifold with out having a mechanic background

7/10

While I didn't find anything inherently wrong with the wording, structure, build and payoff, I have seen the concept and "Manifold" used before. What gave the bar a high score was the "tough axel" wp in the setup. It was a clever way to construct the concept without giving away the punchline.

Letts concepts never work out, I ??? what's wrong with them
helping his bars is a deadlift that could put Greedy in the worlds strongest men

10/10

This is my kind of bar. It utilized a soft personal and a current event. The "deadlift" wp fit well. It wasn't ab how groundbreaking it was though, it was more of how well it fit into the concept as a whole. Using " I ??? what's wrong with them" was probably one of my favorite parts of this bar bc it spoke to your personal frustration in a conversational tone.

your not built for this, 40 wins nothing to show- that's sad fucko
not saying he can't hold up, but it's proven youll crack under pressure like bad stuco

5/10

I was on the fence regarding the setup and the crack under pressure idiom. The opener was choppy, specifically "40 wins nothing to show-that's sad fucko." With the idiom, I felt the concept you went with, more importantly the personal, required a much harder approach to make it work. I would of scored higher if that approach were implemented but with the idiom and simile coupled together as is, it just seems too generic.

your bars are Odd an the voters can trust this boy is weak
he tried to Drive Ways, out of the frontlines & ended up ruined like an Oil Leak

7/10

Great personal. Capitalizing "Odd" really did the bar justice bc at first glance it took a minute to catch what you were saying. Didn't quite reach the 10 mark as I thought the simile, though well placed, was out of ordinary for you. I've seen you pull off concepts such as these without having to lean on similes and this is the 2nd you've used thus far. Just don't become too dependent on them. 1 or 2 a verse is fine, just not back to back.

you'll be sleeping with fishes after this mean servin
cuz if you want this Manta rays a threat, he'll be swimming with Steve Erwin

7/10

Cool concept. Inventive wp with "Manta rays a threat". Nice continuation on the play. What hurt this bar was the excessive verbs. "Sleeping," "serving," "raising," and "swimming." I feel 10 lbs lighter reading all of that. It coule be considered a technical nuance or just a personal dislike but it was enough to have me focusing more on the actions and not on the delivery of the bar itself.

made it to the big screen, off wack bars- your killin it, g
an those jokes will get you put in a Box, Troll.. that parents won't want children to see

10/10

Solid, up-to-date reference. Pretty funny stuff. Wording in the setup could have been better. The comma placement kind of made the opener choppy when it didn't need to be there to begin with i.e. "made it to the big screen, off wack bars". I won't deduct points for this, though.

girls laugh at this shrimp dick, claim they need better eyes
so it's not about making the text larger when bitches complain bout letter size

10/10 - LOTB

Lmaoooo. This floored me. Best 10/10 bar you've had thus far. Couldn't of appeared at a better time in this verse.

your concepts are jailed & what you accomplished isn't hard
Letts fought so long to get a warden battles, i thought he was a full time prison guard

7/10

Could have been a 10/10 but the "warden" wp, even though "a warden" was a dope flip, doesn't necessarily carry the punchline since a warden and a prison guard, in this context, are two entirely seperate positions with different assigned job duties.




Letterman

This dude's a bum. I'll come to your residence to spark shit
& The way I ramshackle make him finally upgrade to an apartment

10/10

Nice wp. Cool flip on a homelessness concept that was brought together creatively. Had a straight to the point feel which walks the line of creative and statementish. I'm partial to that kind of format.

Your girl said your dick is small AF & mine is trumping it
So when she still lies in your bed every night...she's just tryna boost your confidence

7/10

Liked the setup and the execution but the closer had wording issues that could be interpreted as a personal slight on my part. "when she still lies" should have been "when she lies still". That would of had a double meaning i.e. honesty and immobility to make it easier. The double meaning would have made the punchline more appealing and thought provoking. However, in the way that I read it, the closer just didn't benefit from the great setup. I would have scored this a 5/10 but I recognize my criticisms could be a bit too harsh.

You wanna play? I got weapons that'll make him quake fear
Everyone will say damn you went Ham, let...when they see PG tryna Shakespeare

10/10

I've seen this np and wp on you before. At least I think I have. I enjoyed the flip so I'm not going to deduct point. Same with Shakespeare. I was going to deduct for "quake fear" as I initially felt you were trying to word "quake in fear" to correlate with the closing rhyme scheme but after taking a closer look I think it is fine the way it is.

He's right. Your 1st sentence was cocky but u came as boring as it gets
But the bottom line is...shit idk, I really fell asleep halfway through that shit

10/10 - LOTB

Dope personal. Hilariously entertaining in a nonchalant way. The "bottom line" idiom is cliche but the flip on the concept was inventive. I love the dismissive theme of the bar.

Your bars are relative to boredom, so that quote was true man
Cuz if sleep is the cousin of death, your verses must host the family reunion

7/10

I've been told in the past that using back to back bars focusing on the same concept is deleterious to the verse. I don't believe this to be true. This bar elaborated on the previous one and added extra emphasis. While it wasn't as lethal as the one preceding it, I still felt it connected.

A pizza line? Well you aint topping my shit, there's no need to examine
Cuz if that line is food for thought, we must be preparing for a year long famine

5/10

The low score here is due to the context of the perwonal. While yes, you can say that "pizza/piece of me" concepts are too redundant to be taken seriously, I feel you countered it with a particular cliche that is probably just as redundant. This bar would of been a 2/10 but the way you executed it was pretty funny to me, so you get props on the attempt.

His mom didnt birth that huge head & his dad never claimed son
He was just hoping that your mothership you back to the UFO you came from

7/10

While I considered the concept in its entirety as humorous and nicely packaged, the wp in "mothership" took some of the sting away. Yes its been done before but no I didn't view it as a devastating misstep.

you're too wack to battle so much. You not making any friends, b
The way you rampages of wack bars onto the site, I'm surprised voters haven't gone into frenzy

3/10

I rated this 3/10 bc I felt that since you used "wack bars" in the second line then you should have replaced the "wack" from "you're too wack" in the previous line with a descriptive word synonymous to the word "wack". I know that wasn't a huge concern as the "rampages" wp deserved the most attention. With that said, I'm fairly certain you already flipped a much better "ram" at the beginning of your verse. If I could choose between the 2 I would select your "ramshackle" opener easily. This was by far the only low point of your verse that I've found.

your wack verses make us angry. Because of you, NC thinks we're just clowns
I'm just saying you aura negative impact to the site, cuz you're just bringing us down

7/10

Well, I'm going to completely ignore the "wack verses" part of your setup as I feel I was already critical enough as it is in the aforementioned bar, lol. This bar was fun. The whole "you're making us look bad" theme was jokes to me. You used "just" twice in the closer and that was too prolix for a line you needed to be clean. But, you know what, it didn't leave you at too much of a disadvantage here.the best thing you ^^^

^^^ the best thing you ever wrote. It's agreed by anyone feeding your spits
Your verses are a sight for sore eyes, so we're definitely down for blind votes after reading your shit

10/10

Teriffic way to end the verse. Fantastic personal. It was impactful and definitely qualifies as a haymaker.


83/76 Packed Graves. Dope battle guys.

v-Packed Graves