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Thread: Dear General,

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    I love it though. Novac's Avatar
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    Dear General,

    Dear General,
    By: Novac


    Tuesday, January 18th, 1949.
    Dear General,

    I’ve made you a gift, wrapped in cellophane.

    Inside, under the first layer, you will find my hopes, dreams, and life’s work written in manuscript. I leave these to you, my dear General, to do with what you wish. Though, I imagine you might read them, settling down for bed, and shed a candlelit tear to the brutal honesty concealed within these writings.

    Under the second, a paper bill redeemable for 20 pound sterling’s.

    Under the third, you will find 5, 1-quart sized vials filled with a clotted dust of off-red. And a razor, stained with life. My cold heart beats earth-pulse. Chalk veins open ended, shriveled and dried by my own hands. I bled these vials to life. I imagine you might carefully pour onto a glossy mirror, mortar and pestle into a fine powder and straw the pound sterling from your nose…

    (red droplets.)
    (inaudible.)


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    Re: Dear General,

    I like the use of a letter form, interesting use of poetic device
    Good use of metaphors and similies...


    Keep getting up !

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