~Doctors Day...~

[~ProPaiN~]

Some quickish shit ...peep


I Woke Up This Morning, Had An Appointment::
I Had To See A Doctor, For Employment::
It Was At 10, My Clock Read 10:30::
So I Hopped In The Shower And Ran Out In A Hurry::
Finally Got There, Tha Clerk Said "Dont Worry,::
If Ya Name Is Pro, Then Your Ten Minutes Early"::
So I Took A Seat, Feelin-Nervous::
Looked Up At The Ceiling Askin 'Is It Even Worth-It?::
My Heart Was Racing, Im Tryin To Have Patiance::
So I Decided To Start Sedation With Conversation::
Without Hesitation, I Went To The Booth::
I Saw A Sexy Nurse, So I Introduced::
Smoothly I Began..."Excuse Me..::
Havent I Seen You Before In A Movie?"::
She Replied, "You Seem Nice From The Sound...::
But Unfortunately, The Doc Would Like To See You Now,::
Proceed To Room Number 4"::
I Said 'Jus My Luck' As I Walked Threw The Door::
I Sat Down, Onto-Tha-Bed::
Exspecting The Worst As Thoughts Gone-Threw-My-Head::
My Perceptions, Im Starting To Lose::
Essentials Get Lost As The Doc Enters The Room::
She Sits Down And Begins To Write::
Asking Me Questions Of Through-out My Life::
All Of A Sudden, She Stops And She Asks::
"Have You Ever Had A Catscan In Tha Past?"::
I Said "Nah, Why? Is This Fatal?"::
She Replied While Laying The Papers On The Table::
"These Tests Just Might Not Be Right..::
But miss You Too Nice, Seek Professional Advice"::
She Brought In Another Doctor::
Said "Hello Pro, Im Tammy, I Got Something To Offer"::
I Asked "How Am I Supposed To React To That?"::
She Said "Relax, Im Just Goin To State The Facts..::
I Got News You Might Not Be Able To Deal With::
You Suffer From A Severe Illness Called Brilliance ."::......... Word!

Critics....
RESP

[The Realist]

LOL way to make yourself look good
this was funny and nice... flow was on point
vocab was well used...
damn IJL is the shit huh?

Its That Simple

[Wakiyan]

Lol. Very clever. There's a nice flow to it. You had the multies in there, it's a nice drop. And what you lacked in wordplay you more than made up for in flow.

[noncentz]

I LIKKED THIS VERY WELL SET UP KEEPS THE ATTENTION AT ALL TIMES AND THE COCLUSION WAS DIF THEN I THOUGHT IT WOULD BE.YOUR VOCAB WAS OFF THE HOOK AND THE RYTHM WAS THERE...THIS IS ONE OF MY FAV ON THIS SITE ACTUALLY .THIS WAS THAT WELL DONE TO ME.

[~ProPaiN~]

LOOOLL^^^^^

IJL is the SHIZNIT.....NO doubt...lol


we should do a collabo

Hit me up on aim MCpropAIN

[Mistral]

Yeah this peice was good i thought, it was a good read, you had good flow, your multies were pretty good also, and it was funny so it made it a good read overall, keep dropping.

[8-off]

lmao, nice ass drop, flow was on point wordplay was dope, and the endin was 'brilliant'

keep up da good shit homey

[tRiPliCiTy]

"You Suffer From A Severe Illness Called Brilliance ."::......... Word!" bahhhahaha dope ending

bah i dunno, flow was alrite, content
was decent, but i can see u can do
better, stop holding urself back, this
was an alrite story piece, next time
spit on a topic, this seemed kinda
random, but the ending was dope
so i'll let u off with a warning........

[gotaloveforrap]

i was feelin that. cant go wrong makin urself look great. the vocab was great, the worplay was good, the topic was also good. the flow was on target, and i really liked that. good laughs, anywho id rate it a 7.5-8/10. good post man, i really enjoyed readin that.

peace.....

[Topic]

lol i liked this peice, good vocab, good flow and the ending was great, good shit, good content to

[~ProPaiN~]

Thanks..............RESP