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Thread: Delinquent

  1. #1

    Delinquent

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    Delinquent

    I was raised as a good child, never heard a peep.
    But as I elevate to the streets, and stray with all the creeps.
    To stay on my feet, get paid for the crime that I do all the time.
    Every day I weep, when I got nothing to eat.
    I've Declined, no ones fault but mine.
    Hold the line, got a deal going down - All organized.
    Bawl your eyes when it all goes wrong.
    Nothing goes through your head, accept a heavy gun.
    Fear for your Mum, when all you've done is wrong.
    But I couldn't care less at the time.
    Life on the line seemed fine.
    But when you get chased, you get tired.
    Never get yourself wired.
    Unless you want those bullets fired.
    Get the trigger, pull it, death if you don't go through with it.

    This is stupid shit.
    So why are we doing it?
    I guess it's because I'm new to it!

    But I've pulled from this, I'm blown away - Oblivious.
    This is just, my own stupidity.
    For becoming a delinquent in the life of society.
    Try and never lie to me.
    There's no alliance with sobriety.
    And as I hide away on the streets - ever so quietly.
    My boss found out and finds a way to fired me.
    Police lock me up, but I'll never retire tiredly.
    Most likely, I'll stay awake day-to-day and nightly.
    Fight me? You're the one who likes me!
    If it's a fight you want, I'll show you that I'm frequent.
    Only because you know that Zane's a delinquent.



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  2. #2

    Re: Delinquent

    Decent rhyming though the content is a little cliche and hard to follow. I feel as if you sacrifice a little bit of your message in order to fit in rhymes.

  3. #3

    Re: Delinquent

    I liked it, but i have to agree with The Professor. The topic is a bit played, if your gonna do it, go deeper. Fuck conventianal rhyme, tell your story.

    Id rather see a really deep piece than see a piece with a cut off message because the rhyming is forced.

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    Re: Delinquent

    Werd, version two coming soon.


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