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i sit and laugh at moments were i wern't spoken,
fighting demons that aren't here, is it i seem to be the omen?,
watch as the world flares in flames and un noticed vividory,
my future will be made by all my sustained victory,
my foundations have been made i just need to build shelter,
the rain has got me wet and not one of my friends will be 'the helper'
my life has been torn up as if it was a bad drawing,
i get spat on and kicked to the ground but it don't stop me from growing,
theres more cold people on these streets and it ain't even snowing,
but a handful of stars i have but these days they don't seem to be glowing.



i have done some bad things, but doesn't everybody make mistakes
the ground is bait and seems to get ate away at every place i make my stay,
but i'ma stand my ground, and not move,
asif my feet are glued and i can't remove my shoes,
so the ground is either gunnah break or make a change,
either way,
if it breaks, everyone of my statements 'ell stay the same,
cause i ain't the sort of bloke to lie in a tremendous size,
but i speak the truth, and leave you in a clueless state of mind.

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zzzzz....

[Express'on]

I didnt really see the correlation with the title and the "meat" of the piece u wrote...but it did have a decent flow, maybe work on the fluidity of it...u had hard pauses at the end of every bar making u almost force the rhyme but at times it didnt even rhyme...but it still hit tho regardless...just alil constructive criticism no point in pointing out the glory marks all the time...

[Wise Ways]

this piece was decent.. i felt it could have been made better if you just were to proof read it but over all there were some things in it i was feeling.. i liked the "bait" line, i felt that was a pretty good metaphor for what you were trying to get across. theres something about the first line of the piece that made it not read smoothly though.. i think you'll be pretty good if you just work on a couple things man, stay up.

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thanks for the feeed, uppin?

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zzzzz.....

[AveryBlaze]

This piece was pretty good, flow was choppy and the pauses do make you have forced rhymes. Multi's weren't bad, and the structure was decent. Lyrics and Vocab i guess could be worked on a bit more, but overall pretty decent. Keeeepp workin bruh

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cheers for the feed bro : )

[alwerdz wright]

i liked the piece here the storyline followed the point but it did seem as if your rhymes were a bit forced i noticed your attempt at some multis which imo always makes for a better read if pulled off effectively which u could have done better with. the flow was pretty good making for an easier read i just would have liked to see more imagery portrayed into it overall id give this about a 7 /10 stay up n keep droppin homie

[re-create]

cheers for the feed man,
don't feel as if the rhymes where forced but it's all constructive.
peace re-create.