This is the first version of this song, so I already know that a few parts with the doubles is off. I am going to re-record this with a girl I know who is singing the hook. A couple parts will be re-written. But I just wanted to get a feel of the feedback for any tips. I will gladly rtf if you leave me a link, thanks.
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lyrics;
Hate lies & baggage drama Imma bagit
red tag it, drag it, then imma stab it
Throw it in the river you can call me luggage killer
Im movin on so I can get my own
Nobody goin stop me while im traveling the road
Johnny appleseed breeding a new leaf a new seed
memories try draggin me from reality
Oxtytocin coursin when we intercoursin
kissing your throat n hopin your love potion is an endless ocean
how im copin close to fallin not floatin
tossin gin down faster than oxygen
our love explosive like hydrogen
peroxide my eyes so i see no more lies
ive been one to stick my neck out for someone else
found myself in a guillotine felt fucked
next time find me hidin in a guilly suit quick 2 give tha boot
i let you borrow cash smoke hash gettin shit on catching diaper rash
trick or treat tricked me now im bringing sweets
suck on these sweaty cheek wrecking dangling jewels
part of the same plant seperating to survive like vine
connected by the same pipeline to our source
misinterpreted incorrect somewhere in life we strayed out of check
chorus (needs to be recorded still)
Situation critical keep casualties minimal
synnical to the investigation
internal destination she asking me if i cheated or not
bitch you acting crazy a lot I pay the bills
you sittin and chillin with your homeboy dylan
reason to believe that your the one telling the lies
friends feed me information of the other guys
perfect timing aligning the cameras, while my eyes spyed
giving him head lay in the bed what is that you do
bodies collide on the side must of been a magic ride
check the arithmatic you was all over his dick bitch
algorythm proved it magic stick abused it
Lifes like clap on clap off till some drunk asshole
decides he wants to jackoff act tough and stand tall
whoever gonna stand small better learn to play ball
whether emotionally or physically they creating a penalty
selling me bullshit I aint feelin it
Life hasn't been going my way
guess ill stay maybe see a brighter day
what game you gonna play maybe you goin take a risk
why you playing sorry apologizing and shit
what you saying replayin im lion taming
thoughts in my mind blazing
thank you lord cuz life is amazing
chorus X2
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