Cage of pain

[BAR SHOTZ]

I'm swollowed by pain in the hollowest frame
hearin voices in the back and they callin my name
seein rubble around I'm always where trouble is found
I'm weak n I slide through the creases beatin inside
batterd n brave bombs shattered my cage
layin stiff on the ground hard to breath like I'm liven to drown
I feel evil is near they try to poisen my mind the needle is clear
eyes lurk in the back tryin to turn the light on but can't find the circuits to match
searchin the cracks for a key to escape hopin it's a nightmare I'm dreamin to wake
it's all too real don't tell me the demon is fake
my insanities like another tool just to vanish the light
souls tearin from these hands in the night that dig in my flesh
while I'm grippen my chest.... gaspin for breath
sharp pain in my side imagin it's death
wit the blade in his hand grazin me fam
trapped in this cage wit ravishin rage
it's like a theatre of the mind how they capture my stage
they master my grave as I'm walking through a pasture of sage
it's the visions of the afterlife quickly the masters like
reachin his hand a sense of calmness feelin like nottins breachin me damn
the sites are drowning as lights around me
saw the father and looked at dude
said his goodbyes then I'm sucked back and I'm hooked to tubes
I mean the damage is clear as I see my family here
hopen I don't see my grave today lights go dark... just let me fade away

FEED LINKS:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...067/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...995/index.html

[BAR SHOTZ]

bumpin to the top

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

ur flow is really nice bar ur content was dope aswell
, ur structure was diff and had a dif approach then what im used to but it was still nice n flowed really well in my oppinion i didnt really see much forced



layin stiff on the ground hard to breath like I'm liven to drown
I feel evil is near they try to poisen my mind the needle is clear
eyes lurk in the back tryin to turn the light on but can't find the circuits to match


thats the best part in my opinion the last line is dope as fuck

anyways nice drop man

[Dreamer22]

the red ink made it hard to read but pretty cool drop.. but nothing that great since it seems the standards have risen on OM since I've been gone, but, this was cool it had some pretty unique rhymes and ideas hard to imagine what exactly was going through your mind when you wrote it but it was dope and enjoyable for the small time being, not much else to say but keep dropping this wasn't bad at all....

[BAR SHOTZ]

werd? good lookin out for the feed guys

[BAR SHOTZ]

^ lol yea go for it bro