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    aint coming HOME

    tha world is so cold~and~cruel
    its like u lose whoever close~to~you
    and then u wonder now what am i suspose~to~do
    with no father to help coach~you~through
    and no mother to watch over~you.....
    ur boys locked~in~a~box
    some shot~by~the~cops
    cause they was chopping~tha~rocks
    right before the door was knocked~by~tha~cops
    so they started cocking~tha~glocks
    and popping~them~shots
    and now they lost but forgotten~they~not.....
    to show ur "support"
    you go to all the funerals of the dead ones and make it "court"
    and of "course"
    u try to cheer up they fam by telling then they innocent and they gonna get "off"
    but tha "source"
    the cops have is too strong of a "force"
    so like bad weddings he and his family must "divorce"
    while tha other families must get over they "loss"
    and now ur alone in tha world heart made of "frost"
    u try to smile cause u know life must go~on
    and u know u cant show weakness therefore u must be so~strong
    but you've been holding back tears for so~long
    damn how can everything that seems right go~wrong
    you know u gotta hold~on
    and "be~brave"
    and try to show ur grandmother you turned out to be tha good man that "she~raised"
    but she know you've been letting tha "weed~blaze"
    and ur hurt cause you've been silent for "3~days"
    then "she~say"


    "son all u can do is miss~them
    cause people gonna die or end up in tha SYSTEM"


    not meant to be hot its just a real story of something that happened to me as a child.....dont be scared to give me feed.....i'll take it holla






    tha links i need:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...me-385765.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ll-385161.html

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    Re: aint coming HOME

    this piece really struck me hard, i had a couple friends of mine lost in gang violence and drug abuse but the most i can say is structure still needs some help, little more multi use and some more internals but i liked it full hearted

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    Re: aint coming HOME

    this started off syck but fell off because of the structure, Plus like everyone here would normally say, "its already been done" but I dont like sayin that, because, if you never hurd another rapper talk bout this exact situation and use those similar words then I dont think its been done in ur eyes. I DONT think everyone SHOULD be expected to lisin to every rap/hip hop song that is out there, UNTILL a database with every song is created!
    so untill then
    DOPE SHYT
    stay up!!!
    RTF

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    Re: aint coming HOME

    thanks for tha feed and i'll try to remember what was said
    uppping

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