The Super Soldier

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THE SUPER SOLDIER

Meta horrific simplistic through Scientifics
Specifically getting livid, shiving deep like the pacific
With intent spent my back face bars for contraband
Rushed by sergeants and bad lieu to conquer man
Lace wrist with metal, now I’m moved into darkness
Given thirty trial tribunal dismiss my pardonness
And the search turned up armaments
Like my utter intervention consist of heartlessness
Was sent by 13yrs old witness, had the blood of James
Stain the cuticles from rage flooding veins
So the tame not knowing that my words still kill
Like Santa with arsenic, candy canes and ill will
I feel my chi in the solitude
Throwing lunch in protest, guard call it rude
But I prove that the system ain’t systematic
Cage animals played now I sense the static

The pill, the juice, the way to cut loose
The cut boost hysteria, life flow through chutes
Anti super who cares about the goodness
10 times strong and filled with the hoodness
Robotic antibiotics keeps the hate high
Created to defy those who is gun shy
A demigod with bars and stars
Project infected, disinfecting life leaving scars

The floor smells of burn beds and commodes
The static ignited, the frighten now explode
Try to relate calmness but bloody ending wanted
New booties shitting on the fear that been haunted
Revolt like Attica, I’m free to roam the cite
The aroma free the growth in me to fight
Looking for prey in grey uniforms and nightsticks
Plan to do harm with an inmate knife kit
Despite shots of volts, convulse my arm to dig deeper
Through the eye of guy who is the brig keeper
No reason through hooks and leasons
I sever fingers and ankles of one who shook for treason
Once the hope of America now the wrath of science
Turning the base into a blood bank for my compliance

The pill, the juice, the way to cut loose
The cut boost hysteria, life flow through chutes
Anti super who cares about the goodness
10 times strong and filled with the hoodness
Robotic antibiotics keeps the hate high
Created to defy those who is gun shy
A demigod with bars and stars
Project infected, disinfecting life leaving scars

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[soberSE0ULja]

Piece was pretty easy to read, good usage of vocab.

flow was decent but caught up a little at some parts, but overall i didn't get bored so i was able to finish the text.

Only thing i thought was a bit off was that you go from serious vocab and flow to weird metaphors and words like the candy cane bit and "rude" usage. Just made the story seem a bit choppy.

either way, interesting work, keep it up, but try to delve into the story a little bit more.

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Thanks for the advice.....I plan to put this as my first audio, currently working on tracks....uppin