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    Endless Deadends

    Life starts out with a breath, comez to an end like a movie/
    coz we'll all exprience death no escape from Azrael's uzi/
    first notion till the end, wat they call breathing doesnt improve me /
    Emotions taken over and we pretend to take the oppurtunity/
    To stop this social deadend to wake up this poor community/
    People just dont pay attention to this world's immaturity/
    Global warming, wars and fights, where we going? legalizing the dykes?/
    Take Allah's warning, to not take over human rights/
    I see a future with no lights....everything dark/
    Another big bang and we'll all come back to the start/
    Keeps repeating over and over redundancy/
    Strongest nation, feeding on poorest country/
    Bullet holes through kids brains, so you can live in luxury/
    Guns and bombs as their games, to feed the emperailist hungry/
    What kinda immortality, in this fucking reality/
    To kill babies and kids you must have a fucking sick mentality/
    Maybe my voice wont change the world but at least i Said it/
    Let the mothafuckers think lil bit, so maybe they might regret it/

    Its my first time, i know what i wana write about but i cant put it together very welll.. even though im not as good as people who are here, i still watned to write it...
    Last edited by xxxMedCzRxxx; May 31st, 2008 at 12:00 AM

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    Re: Endless Deadends

    haha for first time that was aight dude.
    dont be afraid to post any peice of yours, keep writing man that was good for first time !
    just some advice, the rhymes seemed a little bit forced. the peice didnt have very much flow, gotta make rhymes invebetween soung better
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    I see a future with no lights....everything dark/
    Another big bang and we'll all come back to the start/ <--- here
    Keeps repeating over and over redundancy/ <-----and there
    Strongest nation, feeding on poorest country/

    the two didnt floww much...
    Mutha fucka I was BORN to do this shit.

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    Re: Endless Deadends

    i really liked the content of the piece....i felt the lyrics were nice....the flow was good at times ....the piece was real and emotional...i fucks with with it homie hot
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    Re: Endless Deadends

    this was aight... structure was stretched in a couple of places so the flow fell off. The topic was nice, though... nice to see somethin different. I especially liked these two lines:

    What kinda immortality, in this fucking reality/
    To kill babies and kids you must have a fucking sick mentality/

    stay up.

    and btw, could you RTF? thanks

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    Re: Endless Deadends

    thnx for the ideas... ima use it on my next drop....
    MedCzR....

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    could you rtf on my piece?

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