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Thread: Juno.

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    Juno.




    Juno.
    [Welcome to Earth]


    The slight wife of Zeus and quite enthused
    About leaving forever in a sealing endeavor,
    ...& yet she might just lose.
    Her pride is bruised, steel feelings will sever
    Her ties with dude. Hence crazy nights
    Spent in offence with hazy fights, his bright might is
    Amazing, right? His wishes hold meaning now!
    It's not do the dishes - it's bitch, clean the clouds!
    So loud you can FEEL his sound. He stunk the place
    With his never aging yet better raging sunken face,
    & danced with drunk distaste around her funky waist he's vexed within,
    ...She can take a kick and fake it slick,
    But can YOU imagine having sex with him?!
    He's fucking HUGE, so with a duking ruse.
    ...She's left with sin.
    For the first time: no more angel meets could she fake it sweet?
    They're the worst kind with a cursed mind.
    ....Mistaken freaks, squawking in absurd chimes!
    So she packed her wings and headed to where the action swings;
    She lacked some things - like pride, but thats long left
    At night cried, her songs kept inside her strong chest.
    Herc's gone, 'cept..choked, damn - his old man
    Hasn't his great brain, he's a fake trained by fellow brutes,
    They sell no routes - There's only ONE way,
    And some say, the no strife gold life of a God is great,
    Don't these bastards see the lasting sea of common hate,
    It's often fate, but she has to flee!
    You'd have to be; mortal to NOT consider that blasphemy,
    A life for eternity is no life at all, so she might just fall
    To crawl..on her stomach the lummox won't try to call
    Her if she lands on Earth, he gave THAT planet a random berth,
    Hasn't paid a visit or strayed to give it,
    ...A thought since it's out-of-tandem birth.
    So with the glory land making a gory stand to force her return,
    It just gives source to her turn, a few problems..at first wealth
    She closes her hands and opens her plans,
    ...& prays to the ONLY God she can trust - herself.
    Her luck is cursed/dealt - despite fashion, a nice ration
    It's weird having clouds OVERHEAD, she's even smoldered - bled!
    For the first time with nice cash &..
    As she's overjoyed her lights passioned with golden pride
    ....To enjoy a life where death MIGHT happen!
    LOL

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    Re: Juno.

    What up Burden,

    you have a great deal of solid content within the words you have chosen to represent this story of Juno well. Using that picture as a visual aid assists in bring the story to life while the audience digests that words that you use to dictate the story. You had a descent level of vocab and really brought out the essence of the story...

    Good drop...

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    Re: Juno.

    Damn man, this was a pretty nice piece. I liked your multies, and your imagery was pretty good.

    It just gives source to her turn, a few problems..at first wealth
    She closes her hands and opens her plans,
    ...& prays to the ONLY God she can trust - herself.

    Love this part.

    I was feeling it story wise too man.

    You displayed an emotion of frustration and anger...nice stuff.

    Keep it up man.




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    Re: Juno.

    Thanks guys. Appreciate it!
    LOL

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    Re: Juno.

    Fucking dope, this was worth hall of fame easy. The flow was great - nothing I saw was really forced in, it had a solid structre that didn't get stretched and kept it easy to read, the choice of words was great for the flow, and the emotion was...damn...it was pretty tight, which brought the topic to life, pz.
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    Re: Juno.

    Burden, I have just one thing to say...

    AMAZING

    This peice was written exceptionaly well, easily HOF quality.
    There was nothing forced at all, It was written in a way where you wouldn't lose intrest.
    Emotion was very well thought out obviouslly.
    Again an amazing peice man...

    Feel the power of the darkside!

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    Re: Juno.

    Thanks, I'll RTF.
    LOL

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    Re: Juno.

    that was dope, allot of emotion and pretty good vocab.
    check out my peice i just posted

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    Re: Juno.

    Everyone says this is Hall Of Fame material. Well fuck them for not
    noming it. I guess they wanted me to have the honors IMO...
    This was a very fluent read and was aided by your usage of
    internal rhymes to help this piece maintain that crisp flow which
    was executed well through out the entire piece. I feel that every
    thing meshed in well. The picture and content and the vivid imagery
    which your words planted in my head.

    Great job man - Tific
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