Thug Whyte vs. Da Joka~ (he accepted)

[Auspicious]

Ight dawg..welcome to RB....

rules are......

no bitin
no dick rydin
no feedin
no freepostin
no crew votes
no hatin
I'll give you tha liberty of spittin first..
Check in before you spit tho.. g'luck.... - O n e

[Da Joka~]

Lol well If I gotta get my ass kicked might as well go with a good rapper right? hey can you tell me whats wrong with my rap when im done with it? thanks alot

[Auspicious]

always willin to help new emcees..................
g'luck............................................ ................ - O n e

[Da Joka~]

You think you live the life a gansta', but your only a white guy you can't mess with a nigga//

Thug whyte you think your shits tight, but you can't handle this plight, I cut your cock with a knife//

Your heads to big for your brain, you may be full with fame for winnin some battles its time for me to end our fame by rippin yya a knew asshole//

I don't know why you call your self a thug, your only like a bug squashed on my shoe, oh boohoo your gonna lose//

I see you sittin your jacoozie while your bangin your flooozie, I'll come up and glock you till you start to glow ruby//

The name of the game is slap jack, you just hit a joka and hes about to kick your crack you fag//

I'll end this battle quick your already left with out a dick, and the trigga from my gun pointed at your heads about to click//

[Auspicious]

lol ight

droppin . .

Da Joka? son i never laughed so hard...shit was hilarious//
c'mon yall.. how-fair-is-this ? this is like a sucker punch, you cant even prepare-for-this//

I dont even need to spike.. Im yellin-sets//
shouldn't have accepted yet for battlin a vet ..if RB needed one thing, i know what it is after i just read that.. its spellin checks//

Mentally im too well-for-thee burnt toast on ure raps.. now you smellin-me?//
Cuz potentially your essentially tha grilled cheese i made you is meltin-me//

Cuz to break it down.. when tha frontline was set you shouldn't never took tha time to enter//
Cuz tha only place you'll find wack rhymes like yours would be in tha Wackness emergency center//

wack but there u have it.....

[Auspicious]

ight dawg..

- you need to make sure everything is spelt right
- then have sum sick flow that people will feel
- use metaphores.. their a good attraction in battles
- people like nothing more than to hear sum sick wordplay
- personals.. get personal wit ure shit, they win battles.

work on these things................. - O n e

[Xceltiz]

well thug you should not be playing newbies like us at your level

heres a game me and dajoka had

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...7&pagenumber=2

[Auspicious]

uppin............................................. ..
.................................................. ....... - O n e

[Da Joka~]

Ok I'm uppin this battle but yo thug was my shit good? just wondering cause I dunno
***************

[Auspicious]

it was decent for a newb..deff could have sum elevation tho
dawg.............................................. ................. - O n e

[Da Joka~]

Ugh I need someone to teach me to rap better to bad no one is gonna do that, oh well just have to learn by myself

[Auspicious]

normally i dont teach ppl....but possibly i could give you
a few pointers from time to time................... - O ne

[Da Joka~]

really? nice dawg, too bad I won't be on as often, I'm on at my friends house cause I got banned for free posting and the mod hates me so I will like never be able to get back on.

[Auspicious]

oh ight well PM me when you want sum help...........
.................................................. ............................... - O ne

[Da Joka~]

The only way I could even maybe have a chance of getting back on this site is if a Vet like you recomended that I be unbanned but I'm not gonna ask you to