Haven't written down my thoughts in a minute - i will return with some hard punches ... in the meantime between time i'll be hitten ya'll hard wit comments...aiight...
da hunnet
Haven't written down my thoughts in a minute - i will return with some hard punches ... in the meantime between time i'll be hitten ya'll hard wit comments...aiight...
da hunnet
eyo
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mic check one - two ... makin sure this shiznit is on.....
from time to time you have been on my mind
with your majestic legs to your timeless breasts
i breath your desire
such a desire that blows my strength into an eternity of discretion that is hard to surpass into my many everlasting comfessions
of
my undoubtful love for you
with both time and chance i am transformed from one that discloses to one that transposes any type of affection
i feel your wind
i feel your spirit
i feel your mind
my heart beats to your silent drum
breathe out - so i can breathe you in -
although you don't know who i am i will forever know YOU
from time to time you have been on my mind
with your majestic legs to your timeless breasts
i breath your desire
my love for you always
for years to come
___uppn for some comments...I know i can do better but i just had to get some type of literature out there...its been a minute___
Last edited by SmoothCrmnl; June 20th, 2003 at 09:24 PM
uppn for comments
yo man...wtf was that ish....lol
good stuff man...
keep that raw ish coming
RAW Nice....and confusing 3 words..lol that makes a perfect poem
Nice drop
peep mine
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=58416
thanx ya'll uppn for mo comments
"timeless breasts" okay preacher....keep gettin the literature out
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hahaha i know i know...holla
uppn yall
haha nice...
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nice and the lines that really stood out to me and kept me reading was " breathe out - so i can breathe you in -
althought you don't know who i am i will forever know YOU"
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haha thanx ya'll...keep uppn kidz
ill rhyme, discloses transposes, didn't even though those words existed... the breathe out breath in thing was good, keep it up. peace
pretty interesting....the vocabs are really good..teh flow was a bit off but could work on it....
"my heart beats to your silent drum
breathe out - so i can breathe you in - "
like they said..the whole breathing thing..is defnitely out there nice work!
ahhhhh i feel like i can relate cuz the past few days ive been feeling that shit...and its crazy...ahhh
but yeah...i liked it but couldve been better...drop more!
holl ya'll...thanx for da comments
damn dawg....
very very well written...i liked how u wrote it...it got ur ideas through better and it allowed the readers time to pause and think about wut u just wrote...
that was very deep sonny....very ill..keep droppin that knowledge on us man...
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