16 bars (bored...)

[$$T-Bone$$]

okay...you said this guy's name is punches
let me punch him in the stomach and see if he crunches
leave him puking up old elementary school lunches
he can "produce" a market, throw up bananas in bunches

peel'em back and mash'em in your damn face
you're a disgrace to the whole human race
i'll spray at you like a bitch using mase
i won't miss a spot like Dirt Devil in this place

i'm the self proclaimed man standin up to this bitch
get off da mic little boy, this is grown man shit
Natalie's your chick, but she sucks other mens' dicks
i got proof, put this videotape in and play the clips

i'm sorry i had to be the one to tell you dawg
i feel your pain, take a sip of this here alcohol
down you'll fall, throw yourself up against the wall
make a call to rehab, sense...you lost it all

a song with you wouldn't even have a beat
i'd let you spit 2-bars then it's back to your seat
you can't sit here, i need this space for my laun-dry
back of the bus Forrest Gump, everyday not sor-ry

matter of fact take my basket to the laundromat
then stop by the cleaners to pick up my coat and slacks
a man with heart and smarts needs a few lines to get stacks
you have none, life stops short of crossing successful tracks

success lies ahead in the hands of the beholder
your life ends instead thanks to hollow tips in my holdster
i'm about to fold ya, wake up! you need some Foldgers
i'ma pull out my nine and save you like a closer

and if that won't do then i'ma add some dynamite
either way this battle's gonna have to end tonight
i know you won't go without putting up a fight
but it's time to night-night, so turn out your night-light.

[Boxin Mics]

much better, bro.. still came with a simple rhyme scheme though. nothing really wrong with that. came a lil' nicer with your multi's. flow was nice and smooth. seen a couple similes... not bad for a 16 bar keystyle.. keep on writing..

[Pusha C]

This was a very simple open mic.It could have been better with better vocabulary. Although it had a nice flow to it, it was to plain. Your structure was average i think it could have been better.I liked the topic but you supposed to have ripped it. This was o.k though

[Tony B]

very simplistic, too much street slang. it's an open mic, wording and your personal portrayal plays a big role. not very creative at all, basic rhyme scheme. just my opinion, keep doin you

[Resistance]

Very Simple,
As Everyone Has said above me..Seems like an audio verse, because there was no wordplay or anything..
So Plz don't post this on Open Mic, Because i'm tired of leaving feed on those who should've recorded there verse, and just put it in the audio section yo. But overall...Meh w/e you wanna call it..Freestyle w/e..So plz keep elevating, i see some potential..Keep it up..