Soldier For Something

[Split.]

He's a soldier for something
type to hit the ground runnin'
gunnin down the enemy
to the beat of war drummin
18 years old,
fresh outta basic
of an age to be bold
can't get himself wasted
ideal chasin',
it's his fight for freedom
tryin to make it out this wasteland
to still feel beaten
completin' his tour,
one day at a time
9 months and a wake up
and everything'll be fine
landmines, ak's,
children with grenades
an enemy is an enemy
no matter what the age
a childs face explodes
then his chest splits
5 5 6 rips
his young body to bits
fingertips tremble
as the triggers impressed
tears ripple from his eyes
soakin in the kids death
strugglin' for breath
there's still a few left
rounds rampage down the range
till their fates get met
he set's his rifle down
when the battles said and done
cups the childs broken brow
and let the tears run

He's a soldier for something...
what for... he couldn't tell ya
maybe it's gumption..
maybe a fear of failure..
none the less, every day brings death
nothing for him to do
except... left... right... left...

he's a soldier for something
type to hit the ground runnin
gunnin' down the enemy
to the beat of war drummin'
he's comin' along they say
he gonna be strong some day
that's what he asks for
when he kneels to pray
3 times daily, he faces the east
and implores unto allah
that he bring them peace
he weeps for the brother
that he's recently lost
clutchs the dog tags
of the soldier he shot
no serenity for the vengeful
he lusts for blood
a knack for explosives
and bustin' slugs
he's dreamed of this day..
for all 12 of his years
there's a role to be played
his worst enemy is the fear
his path laid clear right before him
he's just young enough
that the soldiers might ignore him..
he approaches those roaches
with a mighty roar...
allah waaakbar!
then he screamed no more...
the childs face explodes
then his chest splits
5 5 6 rips
his young body to bits
the soldier came near
sets down the gun
cups the childs broken brow
and lets the tears run


He's a soldier for something...
what for... he couldn't tell ya
maybe the ideal..
maybe a fear of failure..
none the less, every day brings death
nothing for him to do
except... left... right... left...

[DOC]

I Dont Think I should Be Giving a Tip As Simple As BREAK IT DOWN Into Sections.. Or SHORTEN IT.. To a Guy Who Has More Posts then Me.. BUT ...........HOMIE.. this Is Long.. and Yet Again I Got To Tell Another Person..YOU ARENT THE ONLY ONE POSTING STUFF FOR OTHERS TO READ.. So Take Some Consideration into Reading Time.. And Kinda Flex your Writings Into Easy Readings..But Overall It Was Decent.. Seemed More Like a Story.. I Dont Know I Got Threw Off At some Parts.. Which Is another good Reason To Chop your Drops Into Parts.. Kinda Like Prt I and Prt II..Feel Me..??

[Split.]

word, I hear ya man... These are actual lyrics from a song though... 2 16 bar verses, and a hook... I wouldn't even know how to go about chopping it... expect audio version soon.

[Cody Nash]

this was dope and probably sounds even doper over a track. I liked the concept of a soldier fighting for something he knew nothing about. the take on it was original and came off more as a freestyle than an actual piece, but i think that's how it was meant to be taken. the repitition of some of those lines was cool, but then again the way you'd added it in there it didn't seem like a chorus or anything. just a follow up slowly showing how the repeated verses actually fit into the piece. great read, thanks!



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328268
think you'll like this one ..

[vocabz]

nice and smooth read throughout the whole piece.. the length of it didnt really seem to bother me much.. considering i think heads should start writing long pieces anyway (except for quick keystyles)... i agree with Nash.. probably sounds doper over a track.. you said this'll be an audio soon.. good cuz ill keep checking the forum for it.. i plan on reading more from you soon, too.. stay active

[P.A.]

that hot

[Split.]

word, peoples... I'll get right on that nash.