4:00 quick keystyle

**vocabz** · February 27th, 2007, 04:02 AM

off the top...

my sole intention is to destroy this whole dimension
so demented, when I look in the mirror theres no reflection
I have a sick mind & there’s no remedy known
I grave fucked terry schiavo then re-buried the ho
I’ll walk into any unknown to face envious foes,
& put the machete to bone with some of the heaviest blows
there’s maybe 80 signs why i’m out my crazy mind
I’m pro-Choice only cuz I like to see babies dyin'
I live in a lonely basis, when I smile, I only fake it
& shiver in disgust whenever I enter holy places
torn in a mess, I was born with sick thoughts in my head
saw the Passion of Christ just to see Jesus being tortured to death
it’s heard to breath, like having a hole in my chest
I’m ugly, this aint me… it’s a ghost haunting my flesh

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327995

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=325804

**Engivale** · February 27th, 2007, 04:40 AM

Haha, it was funny. For a keystlye i mean, it was not bad at all. You had some clever lines and it just kind of went with it, as it should be. It was pretty cool to read how your thoughts were streaming here, you have a good knack for rhyming and that is a tremendous first step towards lyric writing... you seemed to effortlessly go from syllable to syllable without skipping a beat. So good job on that front. That all being said, this piece of course means the equivalent of nothing, so I'd like to see a topical from you using the same kind of reckless, rhyme-scheming style yet incorporating a theme and message into the lyrical content. Stay up.

**vocabz** · February 27th, 2007, 06:49 AM

^i appreciate the feed, man...

**Facts Machine** · February 27th, 2007, 06:54 AM

This was interesting. The rhymes were hot along with the whole concept. It was simply a dope verse showing that you have potential to make something with even more meaning. The way you ended it made the rest of the verse make umm how you say, final sense?.... well yeah maybe you know what im tryin to say. Well, anyways hit my link up please and give me feed-back. peace.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328177

**vocabz** · February 27th, 2007, 09:37 AM

^ I appreciate the feed, yo...

**Mag...** · February 27th, 2007, 09:38 AM

decent flow not much there for me to get in to
like you said for a keystyle this is a decent flow

**vocabz** · February 27th, 2007, 06:50 PM

^i appreciate the feed
UPPIN

**$padez_92** · February 27th, 2007, 07:02 PM

dat wuz ridiculous.definitly feelin it alot.keep up da good work!

**vocabz** · February 27th, 2007, 08:55 PM

^i appreciate the feed..
UPPIN!!!

**Spoken** · February 27th, 2007, 09:22 PM

This was short and nice....It could have been better..But this was nice in multies and mettas..Very nice flow as wel..Nice strucure it could have been put together better Though..It was nice for a fast lil keystyle nice shit homie

**Freeney** · February 28th, 2007, 12:48 AM

this is the type of stuff i like to read, demented minds ,gross explicit lyrics and more than anything a strong twist at the end to tie the story together and explain or give understanding...the flow was pretty ill altho it started out a little choppy and off rythm, u caught it tho and then ran with it.....the terry schiavo line was gross but funny as fuck and then the closer was just plain illy.......pretty decent, i like writing whatever comes to my head as well.....decent drop