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Thread: ~the plague is vague~

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    ~the plague is vague~

    he feels hidden and safe in his secrecy,no secrets to leak to me
    not tellin shit gives him decency,i see it differently
    we all talk equally,legaly lost in a system
    of distant visions,that splits like light dipped in prisms
    then leaked from tha incision,tha bright has risen
    like white blood cells driven into a place where nothins livin
    ive given things a second thought,so check tha box
    outside im live i thrive on sex and pot,intellect that shocks
    i confess yet press to stop tha tape from rollin
    i never hate tha cold,then break my hold on souls kept captive
    actin i never shake tha snow,fallin slow and its too late to grow
    should've got that out of tha way,no child shit today
    thats over,still sober from hard drugs
    far from tha stars and sun,ive jarred plugs loose from there sockets
    confused,i choose a new topic,misconstrued my views i dropped it
    hot like rocket fuel,i stock it,keep a steady supply
    my minds heavy when high,ready to fry tha mic circuits
    let me just try,i might work it,ya minds deserve it



    this perfect feelin i cant describe,inside finaly i feel alive
    and still im high,tha vibe,it radiates to every one around us
    surround us with fresh concepts and ses that sounds lush
    soft as plush underneath tha feet,take a seat,we eat
    feast on beast roasted,piece for piece im coastin
    toasted on smoke and weekends,if i choke im peakin
    leakin my personal down pour to a stranger,im in danger
    my styles a messy baby girl,i gotta change her
    tha same shit is gettin repetitive,slurred it with some sedatives
    i feel perfect without my medicine,still i tell myself to let us in
    tha other me says to flee,run away from it and dont return
    couldnt do it,my original self wouldnt let it burn
    from trial and error is how i learned,to my concern ive turned
    to a different alliance,everythings unexplained with science
    might as well teach with silence,help us sleep with violence.
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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    I really like this actually. The topic is interesting, but you used description in an effective way. Your vocabulary was good and your rhyming was pretty good. I liked your structure, but the font is hard to read. This piece has a lot of imagery which helps to make it more effective. Overall good job.

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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    thnks....up


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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    up...


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    up.....


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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    This definitely was dope. I agree with Fiyashawty..."The topic is interesting, but you used description in an effective way." Most of all, I loved the vocab.... The rhyming was on point, too. Overall, this was fucking incredible, yo. Its like I can see exactly where your coming from.....

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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    thnks.....


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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    TITLE IS JUST A BIT UHMM??/???/?


    neway...... seems you put a good effort into the multi-syllabnle internal rhymes so yea thaat mos def gave tyhe piece a dope flow.......vocab was decent......... though as it goes on the flow seems a bit inconsistant as such.like the line starts off at a certain pace. then needs to sort of speed up to stay on time.

    imagery was sort of there but probaly woulda been a bit more dope if certain lines/bars was worded a bit more deftly. coz some lines seemed a bit jumbled... or wordy even whereas other lines had a low syllable/word count............

    some lines diddnt seem to rhyme with anything which lost me a little as far as fluency goes
    soo all iin all a coo write,but could of had some more entertainment value perhaps within the story and wordplay could be enhanced as well as wording. had a few aiite metta attempts but the mettas also could of been smoother with better wording


    decent drop tho

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326351
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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    thnks....up..


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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    wtf @ this getting slept on. Liked it man, had some abstract shit going on in here and some nice imagery that kept me reading. Good use of multi's without going over the top and solid vocab to boot. You reminded me why i come in this forum in the first. Hit me up for a collab man.

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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    This was dope. you had excellent rhymes. internal rhymes, good job.
    the topic was interesting and different. i liked it. your flow was on point continuesly throughout the peice. imagery was nice throughout as well. and overall this was an enjoyable peice to read. i liked all of it. and can u rtf on my new peice. thanks

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    thnks..i appreciate it....up.......


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    Re: ~the plague is vague~

    The title makes it sound like it could be a funny piece but yet....

    it was abstract and good man i enjoyed reading it it contained a decent amout of multies and the vocab was nice too i loved the way you worded it with some sound a likes too, this is a really nice piece man, good job!!!

    lookin forward to readin more of your stuff

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