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    It's a New Beginning

    my flow's too inticing for you to pass it up
    you pussy, and i just cant stand to see you actin tough
    i traffic runs to lavish castles and slums
    ace in the cards like Jim Carrey's, why i'm laughin it up
    stackin the funds to keep you bastards away
    stashin guns in my place in case they crash where i lay
    where i stay's where i pray and you dont wanna interrupt it
    the games like full toilets - it's taken enough shit
    you lames is munchkins compared to my frame
    my hollows like lobotomies, they tare at your brain
    to dare is insane, Sunny's got it locked, bitch
    bet you never tired, never runnin from the cops, snitch
    i pops it, come into your crib like a locksmith
    and let you die in rememberence of lyin like Johnnie Cochran
    you not shit, pigeon - youre Andy Dick at best
    while my broad's like Charles, in charge of handin me grips til death...

    '07.

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    Re: It's a New Beginning

    where i stay's where i pray and you dont wanna interrupt it
    the games like full toilets - it's taken enough shit

    mad me chuckle

    some good shit man... good rhymescheme for the most part, multies fell off a little at the beginning but not too bad... flow was basically on point... punches were funny... good shit man

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    Re: It's a New Beginning

    flow and punchs were on point. but yeah you did have some sloppy multies in the beginning, I've seen worse. So dont sweat it, it's no hate. And I think you could've made this a little longer, to stick it out more. But these were my favs......


    1)....
    where i stay's where i pray and you dont wanna interrupt it
    the games like full toilets - it's taken enough shit

    2)....
    i pops it, come into your crib like a locksmith
    and let you die in rememberence of lyin like Johnnie Cochran


    So just keep doing your thing, keep the flows goin'.

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    Re: It's a New Beginning

    i liked tha punches...tha wordplay was basic......you had multis just nothing complex...i liked tha emotion....structure was good...all in all not a bad piece...you should just try and elevate on your complexity..and your wordplay..maybe a some more complex vocab as well...other than that.not too bad...keep droppin and elevatin.~1~


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    Re: It's a New Beginning

    everything has been said already I think but I guess I'ma repeat it...muahha
    punches were good as stated but some stood out to me...since I'm a lazy mofo I'm not gonna quote em though..hehe
    anyways the wordplay was coo and the flow was consistent...keep it up...pz

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    Re: It's a New Beginning

    anyone else?

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