just some shit

[tha alpha male]

the shotgun blast, the flags at half mast
i jus took this kids life but now its all in tha past
gang signs fly up as street lights go on
crooked cops relaxin while tha street fights go on
ya c weed sells, acid kills
fuck it i sell still, then wen dudes die i take they shit and sell their pills
buy some mo shit wit my newly taken bills
then sell more shit that kills to the ppl in his will
cuz im cold hearted, a soul departed
so fuckin psychotic ppl think im half retarted
cuz i let the shots spray and watched as dozens darted
but the shot still found its mark and now i kno wut i done started
there gunna be reprucussion, theyll bust till im gushin
ill stay low, leave em frustrated nd cussin
"damn we cant find em man" "this fuckin dudes ghostly"
jus then i show mah face and get them b4 they got me
now im back to square one, what the fuck is mah problem
i couldnt jus move away i had to go and drop em
im fuckin goin crazy as mah rep is increasin
but most the city want me dead, so now the population decreasin

[Me$$y One]

very plain and simple.. not very creative or original
No concepts whatso-ever, you told a story
But there was no story behind it..

Need to put more thought/effort into this

[tha alpha male]

ya i kno, thats y i titled it like that....it wasnt nuttin i even i relle thought about....it was practilcally a freestyle

[Floyd Powell]

this wasnt bad at all... you came ight... a quick key i could tell.. im in a rush or id stay and put more sorry bro.... ill keep in touch... one

[Donald Trump]

i dont agree with Messy i think this was really good for something quick i think it wouldv'e been better if you had made it a bit longer and elaborated and said why everyone wanted you dead but still also some advice i would like to kill you is try not to use so many bad words because it messes up the flow it would be ok if you used it for emotion like "he was pissed screaming saying FUCK THIS" but if you just say it like "then sell more shit" it messes up the flow so try to lay off it for a bit overall this piece was good i liked it keep writing and keep getting better