Brink Of Destruction
Life sucks, I got nothing to live for, so I'm on the BRINK-OF-DESTRUCTION/
But these rhymes are what I live for, so I get on the computer and I SYNC-ALL-THIS-FUCKIN'/
Music to my MP3 player and let it RUN-THROUGH-MY-EARS/
I'm paranoid, I think everyone's out to get me, so I'm puttin' a GUN-TO-MY-PEERS/
This isn't long enough to be posted here.
- Atty
Last edited by Atti; January 28th, 2007 at 07:42 PM
tha brink of destruction, you stuckin/ what kin? leave you pink like you blushing/ wrist frost like i'm slushing, face'n me is like suicide, waste'n ya own blood like knife'n ya cuzon/ then my whip sitting 24's twice for tha dozen, and i'm clean so when bitches wet'n me up, they ain't gotta thrw no sudds in.
spit wit tha ill, doctor like get with tha pill, cuz i'm sicker than a dick with tha spills, quik with tha steel, yall niggas is N-O, like a pic on tha field, catch your football and holla back, i let my dollas stack, that's why tha cutty is cream and tha impala black, and shit you got is fake....listen it's nada fact.
OM has to be 16 lines....
Didn't really like this...no concept...no topic at all...maybe if you made it longer and worded it better, I could have more to say but other than that...I just wasn't interested in this drop, it was too short, and no talent put into it
Stay up.
I checked your feedback to other pieces, & I was ecpecting the usual BS but you actually left decent opinions, man, so I dont know why you posted this?
The backslash strutcture is really hard to follow, & makes the piece look way too easy & whichever words I cant think of, I think if you carried this on it might of been an okay piece, just next time make it a little longer & see what you can do about the structure, goood luuuck.
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