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Thread: Slow and steady: fatal decision

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    Slow and steady: fatal decision

    Sweat drips, from red lips, as his head dips
    And slips, into one of those mad trips
    Ten clips, a script, hid under his mattress
    He‘s a mad man, serial killer in practice
    Three buried in the back, one in the front
    Fuck her, kill her, have more fun with her cunt
    No son of the sun, he lives in the shade
    Lives in a cage, a blockade of invisible rage
    Dismay is his ray, his light in the night
    Guided by fright, with his eye on a fight

    Hollow shadows scale the streets at dawn
    When light hits your lawn, this beast is gone

    Fire in his eyes, a Michael Myers in disguise
    Today is invincible, if tomorrow never dies
    Write his rights, his beliefs and his worries
    But don’t anger a man who’s lethally hurried
    Streets are bleakly blurry, no meat here, it’s early
    He continues to scurry, his mouth bleeding and furry
    double vodka to numb the pain, he was dumb again
    Tired and bored, from no fun in this funny game
    Smoked too much dope, and bit a bit of his jaw
    He needed fame, his eyes lit at the thought
    But does fame, only come to killers we caught?
    Nope, ‘Jack the Ripper‘, to villains he’s god

    Funny things happen, life is a stand-up
    He has a man, against the wall with his hand’s up
    Thinking he’s mad tough, gripping his knife
    Stabbing this man, in front of his kids and his wife
    Soaked in blood made his way through the kitchen
    Snagged on the back gate, he made a fatal decision
    Cut off his top, and escaped with precision

    Three days later the local papers are hailed
    Story of the year, made for good sales
    The killer rots in a cell, through fault of himself
    DNA got him in jail
    If he stayed slow and steady, he’d be home already
    And not locked up for life and alone at twenty

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    Last edited by Witty; January 22nd, 2007 at 03:27 PM

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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    Duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude. This was pretty dope man, a good flow in tact with this one and I loved the multies in like the first four lines. The tommorow never dies line was pretty dope because it reminded me of James Bond, and the whole piece was just very dope man. I could picture someone grabbing their crotch and just rapping wit this script, and just a lyricist reciting this with a great flow. Good job.

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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    pretty cool drop here

    great flow for the most part, its kinda choppy for the first stanza but its kindof appropiate for the character your developing

    overall very solid from that point out, the tommorow never dies bar was pretty dope

    the one thing i was slightly dissapointed in was that after your intro i was expecting a much more hardened criminal as opposed to some Jack the Ripper fanboy- and thats probably undeservingly harsh from me

    the conclusion wasn't super exciting but was a good wrap-up for an overall intriguing verse

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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    up.

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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    Upping.

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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    not too shabby...lol..for real though...solid piece....i like tha imagery...tha wordplay and vocab were ill...tha story wasnt that original,ive heard pieces that are somewhat tha same..but it was delievered very nicely...flowed very well...not really any flaws in this piece aside form you need alittle more creativity....but thats not saying much seeing as this piece was ill either way...keep droppin tha hottness.~1~


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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    Quick reply. Probably the best flow I've ever read from you :-D
    Dope, kept me reading, as many people don't lately..
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    Re: Slow and steady: fatal decision

    Thanks people, appreciate it

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