Making my colab verse and our details now homie.
Making my colab verse and our details now homie.
bloody yankee
feed man damn i hate getting slep on yet i dont get any recognition for my writing but its koo.
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ok the wordplay was good. emotion was strong. the thing that i liked for some reason was the way u went from complex rhymes to siplistic rhymes through out the peice. that i thought was great. the vocab was ok noting great. but this was quite a good poem. the syllables in ur rhyme skeme was crazy switching from 1 to 2 and over and in the second stanza u had a more complex skeme with the ab ab instead of the aabb which i thought brought a new edge to the peice. but overall i like it homie.
cant wait to see u in a battle again..
~1~
yea i wanted to switch smoothly with out wording it too much ya know so i figured make the AABB a typical base rhyme while the ABA went on into more depth of meaning and complex
thanks man. same here
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Very nice piece with a poetic feel to it, The only thing I can say I didn't like was the way you ended it, it just felt to basic. But other than that I was really into this piece, It flowed real smooth reading it out loud, the creativety certainly showed and you didnt have a hard time bringing it out, the emotion was what I felt you had best in this piece, good job man, keep up.
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this had mad creativity, i luv reading these deep rhymes that actually mean something... its got a poetic touch to it... good job n keep it up!
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This was a nice drop. I liked the concept in this, and you impressed me throughout. Your flow was good until the third paragraph, where you slightly fell off. The imagery in this piece was very good aswell, and also the emotion was there.
can you leave some honest feed on "Ride Till We Die" please
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i like this piece....i dig tha concept....you wordplay and rhymescheme were on point.....i liked tha vocab and tha way it flowed....i cant really say much about this piece that hasnt already been said...i liked tha multi and tha complexity...very ill piece....keep droppin tha hottness.~1~
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Str8 Piece .... it was common piece. The flow was okay, but more to a poetic, and emotional tone. The vocabulary was nice, and i was feeling the imagry. but think it was a bit past tense. mostly it wasn't that intresting because most ppl write bout things like this. but this was well written... keep up the science
I was impressed with how you based the entire thing on the whole love turning sour scenario, & used clever words to describe certain things, aswell as your entire rhymescheme & how you constantly switched the sytle you were using with each verse. You used bitter emotion in the central verse which I really liked, switching the styles here made it stand out for me & Im a sucker for this type of writing, the whole 1/3 rhyme, 2/4 rhyme. People often think this is easier to write, but when you can continue it like you did & have it still make sense, it shows talent & how well its written. Honestly, though, I didn't care much for the terms used in the red font, they left me a little confused & I didn't know what was happening at first, they were well-written don't get me wrong, I just wasn't really feeling the way you went about wording them, I know that it fitted well with the rest of the piece, but I think if you'd of switched your use of vocab here, aswell as switching the styles, both verse would of stood out more from the rest of the piece. This was a stellar drop dude, I enhoyed the read, you are a good writer & the flaws I mentioned are basically coming from point of view, as I said it was all strong & well-written, but my preference of different things will undoubtedly vary from yours, so really take nothing bad from what I said.
Now go reply mine!
lol.
i will now homie thanks for the feed.
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This was cool..
Really creative, but sometimes I felt that it was so creative that it took away from the actual representation of the piece. I was confused based on the variety of tenses you used throughout, so make sure your tenses are consistently on point. Also, the coloring of the different stanzas doesn't do anything for me, but left me kind of confused. On the other hand, the rhyme scheme was there, and then it wasn't, but your emotion and creativity carried the content of this piece for the most part. Your choice of words were sometimes overdone, and other times it was well-written. Pretty good stuff.
AI. Legendary.
19x HOF. Seven Titles. 50.
thanks.
appreciate it.
SUP MAYNE!!!! dat was tight nah mean... i couldnt get that much words in to my head right away... the vocab and the ryhme scheme is legit... your had a nice concept in mind and you broadened it to your limit and used it nicely in ways more than one.. the switch aswell is nice and it went well with it and you had me form start to finish i mean i cant say much cus most iof it has been said already so word to ya mother and nice drop! keep droppin no stoppin... "I GOTTA LEARN BIG WORDS"...
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