My Memories

[J. Butler]

This was good, no doubt, but it needed more difference, a few I caught from Runaway Love, but in any case, This was a good song, but still seemed a bit copied. 7.5/10

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324095

[Soule]

Are you stupid? I made this up, these were people I lvoed in my life dude. RUNAWAY LOVE? Fuck that, These are true stories that I was a charetor of their life story. RUNAWAY LOVe, shiiit.

TRUE STORIES I LIVED THROUGH.

[J. Butler]

Don't say crap dude, I know man, I know, I'm just saying, from what I noticed.

[Soule]

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[P. Mortuus]

Pretty good piece, one of your better reads no doubt. Structuring and other presentation issues were in majority all in check, so that's aight. The main concept behind this was good, done before, but writing on truth is always a good way and is what writing should be primarily used for other than escapism. Overall, i found that though, tat time the language wasn't wow...everything was adequate and in totality, provided a good and full read. Nice work, stay up^.

[Soule]

Thanks. you too.

[HU$LER]

props on this one neatly done
carryed out well an eplained 5 peps perspective
dont see this much on here
keep it homie..........

[Soule]

thanks.

[Soule]

Upps.

[one way]

Its all too simple and basic, you need to add more intelect and poetic devices, imigrey was weak left nothing to the imagination or to think about, which is what peotry is all about, you told a story but thats all I felt it was. Try being more artistic with it, cause after all poetry is art, story telling isn't as much, keep up hommie.


peace

[Soule]

You dont know anything about Topical do you?

[vocabz]

The flow to the piece was nice and smooth, and you had me hanging onto every word. The vocab was decent, but not perfect. It really doesnt matter though, cuz Im not really the type to base a piece on vocab. The emotion was very strong, no lie. It sucks to live a fucked up life, I know... My mother was a crack-head, and a bad one, too... I mean, I dont know if she was a whore, but she might've been. My mother threw me to foster care, when she claimed her addiction. I guess, she knew from the heart she couldnt raise me properly... My father split when he busted the nut, so... This piece really struck me the most... Im sorry I couldnt get to it soonier, but it was way back on page like 3. Im diggin through all the old stuff now, cuz im caught up with the new shit. Im sure you know how it is.... The overall- fucking dopeness, man.

[Soule]

Thanks.