ya thnx for the nice comment... but i think imma leave the group
theres to many assholes herre... i dont come on this site to get dissed so w/e peace
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dont let these fools get you down...they just like to rag on someone whos worse than them..its a bully thing...dont let them discourage you...keep elevatin and shit..for sure.~1~
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Yup..make more effort..though don't just stop cause of hate na mean.Originally Posted by .TreaZoN.
cch all of a sudden im gettin luv... well thnx
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none of the people who have hated on you have any sort of reputation or status on this site anyways, so they're in no sort of position to judge. as for this piece, and your writing in general.. you could use some elevating. a key thing would be to seperate your lines but just hitting 'enter' at the end of each to avoid writing in lump sum paragraphs. also, avoid using net-slang with the abreviated spellings and letters because you're going to catch a lot of complaint for that. contectually, I've seen much worse. overall I see a sense of heart that you're attempting to bring out, you're just short the techniques to do so. I suggest reading more pieces by other writers. check out some of the pieces from the hall of fame or the legends section to see some examples of imagery, emotion, rhyme scheme, flow, world placement, storyline, approach, ect. don't just give up though.. like I said, half the people who have posted in this thread can hardly write themselves.
if you get a chance, leave feed on my new piece,
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=324274
po'ethics /
abstanticollective.
The love you're recieving all of a sudden is from respected writers here, not the bullshit who hate everything.
Take a lot from it, & you'll learn quick. I hope you take it all & become a great writer.
lol thnx... n ya they r dumb so fuck em
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im not talking shit...
im telling you to structure that mess so we can actually read it.
READ MORE
twixn excluded...hes got enough cred to criticize...it may be harsh..but take what he tells you..its all help...what up twixn....after all those deletes your still up on this site..what up...we should collab sometime..~1~
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Terrible. First off, Dont speak about what you dont know. Its not asd easy as just getting off of it... It, like every other addiction out there, is an everyday choice. Fix your structure, Scheme and lyrics.. No hate baby, just word it like youve lived it. One.
R.I.P. Darrent Williams. You will live on through your family, friends, fans and the Broncos Organization. One Love.
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Trapt in a Bitch - Response to Sto0ones Meth Poetry...
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So See Ft. Baron P. Mortuus
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