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    My Rage

    Yo all , im MurkZ , from London , England UK. Im gunna show u guys how it goes down where im from.

    - My Rage

    V1

    Your not in my life your not on my page
    all you do is build up my rage
    gunshots will turn your white shirt red
    bussin blows straight up into your head
    my bars ? there sick and lethal
    once i start your stuck like treacle
    bouncin your head like a basketball
    i got an extra violent arsenal


    Rollin you down a hill in a bin
    im sendin knees elbows and fists to your chin
    leavin you underneath the thames
    im rollin up , drawin the glock in a mercedes benz
    i graff , so ill draw for dat can
    RUN! Just run while you can
    You'll be bungeein without a rope
    off the london bridge so just hope

    (Chorus-

    You dont wanna make me get mad
    You dont wanna make me for the black bag
    (AND AGAIN)
    You dont wanna make me get mad
    You dont wanna make me draw for the black bag

    You dont wanna make me go sick
    You dont wanna make me draw for the sharp stick
    (AND AGAIN)
    You dont wanna make me go sick
    You dont wanna make me draw for the sharp stick

    V2

    Its MurkZ , and im Murkin
    When it comes to bars yours just aint workin
    On my own i run this earth
    Step to me and youll just get turfed
    Its Simple like ABC
    ill sit down an eat your KFC
    Im up for the munch ill munch your phone
    Ill munch your phone just for the one ringtone
    Hit a left an a right and an uppercut bang
    See these bars ? they are nang
    Ur just a tramp with wholes in your socks
    youll get boxxed like jason boxx
    Yes , its MurkZ im never in a hurry
    I got the shit dat will make you hurry
    Wot i carry gets me money
    It may look jokes but it aint funney
    And ive got too much potential
    To my crew yes i am essential
    Mid top yeah dat is sequential
    I am beggining and now i end all.

    (Chorus-

    You dont wanna make me get mad
    You dont wanna make me for the black bag
    (AND AGAIN)
    You dont wanna make me get mad
    You dont wanna make me draw for the black bag

    You dont wanna make me go sick
    You dont wanna make me draw for the sharp stick
    (AND AGAIN)
    You dont wanna make me go sick
    You dont wanna make me draw for the sharp stick

    .. two links to have this reopened.

    - Atty
    Last edited by Atti; January 12th, 2007 at 01:36 PM

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    Re: My Rage

    All feedback welcome.

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    Re: My Rage

    This read like a commmercialized attempt to gain fans, but that's not how it works here buddy. It was painfully like the artists in the game right now. Talking about money you don't necessarily don't have and situations you probably haven't been in. You'll sit down and eat someone's KFC? Really, that's crazy, but anyway, I feel that you have a looooooooooooong way to go as far as overall consistent, mechanically fulfilled production goes.
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    Re: My Rage

    lol welcome to the site b...


    a few things... work on... flow... and I mean literal flow of the piece... cause the lines are to short... punchlines... eating someone's kfc'll get you beat up... using a punch to destroy someone's character'll get you props...


    peep anyone of Nique's joints and you'll see what I'm talking about... Good luck bruh...
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