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    Pain of guilt

    Everyday I look in those eyes-of-yours, even when times-are-soar, I see what's beyond-those-eyes
    All her life she had to respond-to-lies as big as a dinosaur, she feels like she'll fly-no-more, got her saying nows the best-time-to-die

    It hurts to see my baby go thru-all-this and when you upset I cant even give you-a-kiss
    Even when you happy inside you're blue-and-pissed, wish I could make-you-happy and take-apathy, never leavin cuz I'm glue-that-sticks

    But what hurts the most is I'm the cause-of-ya-pain, when we walk in the halls-its-insane
    you dont wanna talk to me and just-keep-walkin, but have a lust-for-stalkin you and neva leave ya alone, askin whats wrong but we all-not-the-same

    How could I do such a tihng to you-in-the-past unfair like jews-gettin-lashed, I hurt the innocent fragile girl I'm tryin-to-protect
    She's dyin,-mentally-wrecked cryin-not-knowin-whats-next,

    Its all my fault, I put her in a world-of-despair, I hurled-her-in-there, and I just ask, why-did-I-do-it
    I only cried-when-I-knew-shit, when I understood the events goin on, but now I just cry everyday outta the fact that ur hurt, on top of it you tell lies-that-added-to-hits

    You avoid me pretendin nothings wrong when-its-obvious, like I'm then-oblivious, like I'm only in this-to-use
    Everyday I hate myself for what-I've-done, for when I cut-my-hun, I'll release my problems when I cup-some-rum, what I still have left with you is a risk-to-loose

    You didnt deserve none-of-that-shit, just an innocent young girl lookin-for-love on the lookout even when ya puttin-on-gloves, then I come along and give you some-large-fat-hits
    Hits of pain, hits of betrayal, and to think you were happy-inside now life is a crappy-ass-ride, and its all becuase-of-me

    Deep down inside when you workin hard, not b/c you studyin, cuz you coverin up depression, it would be snappy-to-die, did you ever see-love-from-thee
    The memories echos thru-my-systems I wanna take it out on someone so I choose-my-victims, there might be a day my morals would be lose-and-I-hit-them

    Even tho we sorta worked things out I still feel like it was yesterday, it may look like I'm concentrating on the test-today, but I'm worrying bout my guilt and booze-til-its-ten
    PLain and simple I hate myself b/c of what I did-back-then I was stupid like a kid-thats-ten, like a farmer that bids-his-hens

    I wish I could go back-to-the-past to snap-all-my-acts, prevented this shit from startin, just glad you didnt get rid-of-ya-friends
    I have no idea how we worked-things-out now things go to normal as you come to school with a shirt-and-blouse

    I still cant believe I hurt-my-spouse, ever since then I've been-faithful, but I know you dont beleive that even with the evidence I provide, and you see an evil emptyness in me like hidden-space-holes, but I wanna let you know, I'd go if one of us were-to-douse

    I've scarred-you-for-life and for that I physically marred-myself-twice, I still worry for you, are-you-alright?
    You might think I dont love you, and this guilt is coming from nowhere, the stars-are-in-sight, I wish we could watch em together, or maybe its me about to be run over by a car-with-big-lights

    I dont know what-you-beleive but its not helpin with the cuts-I-receieve but for now we just go on livin life together tryin to rebuild-from-the-past
    EVeryday I thank god we're still-together and that we'll-never be apart for now, the only reason I see-will-to-live-at-last

    Thats what I see in your eyes...everyday
    When we hug
    When we talk
    When we kiss
    When we study together
    When we're at your house
    It all goes thru my mind...all this shit

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    Re: Pain of guilt

    One.. Its Long Homie.. Cut It To parts Next time..Your Not the Only Head Dropping Posts For others To Read.. Eyes Hurt After Awhile Homie..(True?)

    Two.. Not Bad.. but Not real On Point..Multies Like Crazy..(TO FUCKING MANY)..And 80% of Them Didnt Rhyme..(Critique Homie)..Thing About Multies.. is Its A collab On Words that Sound Rhymed Together..

    Three..It Was Like Oh okay He gots a Nice Follow Going.. but then It Got Choppy.. Got Okay.. then Hit Choppy Again..So thats Another good Reason to Cut It up Into Sections.. Makes It So you dont Get thrown Off Also..Of course Unless This Was Pre Wrote then Fuck It Do what You Like..lol..not Bad.. but not Great.. continue Dropping though..

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    Re: Pain of guilt

    uppity up up

    Thanks for feed

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    Re: Pain of guilt

    bruh
    the multies and rhymes in this were sick
    i bet it would real good with audio
    toward the ends though you got kinda sloppy and the line were way stretched

    Everyday I look in those eyes-of-yours, even when times-are-soar, I see what's beyond-those-eyes

    this was the dopest part and it was the 1st line
    write everyline with that mood and you'll have yourself an amazing read
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    Re: Pain of guilt

    yo sick peice... u came mad creative with tha multiple rimes.. it was flowin mad good .. but tha flow started 2 fall off towards tha end.. prob cuz u were thinkin how 2 wrap it up.. but overall sick peice
    Y should i fear a man if he bleed like i bleed....

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