The Hold Up

[Kurios™]

(Verse 1)
Get on the ground everybody down it’s a stick up
Im stiff stuck lookin’ at the dents in their pick up
‘Jesus’, a lady screamed, fallin on the floor quick
seein she was seated in the beam from the four fifth
‘don’t flinch or Im shootin his clip moved and
hit the wall ‘stay low’, his accent Cuban
guess he’s the leader, the other two already shanked a fella
took a 9 milla pulled a trigga on the bankin teller
Damn I thought while the three were still confused
Black masks on their faces thinkin’ ‘fuck what will we do?’
I crept fast got the gun and cocked the tech back
Popped one straight in the head and saw his neck snap
Fuck it I aint goin out my rushes consumed
Plus I frontin cause I aint got nothing ta lose
His Face Bruised On the Way to the door Move!!!!!!

(Silence)
I Got away Easy Even Scott Free
But the Hold still anit done for the Last 3!!
The chiefs screamin’, ‘come out with ya hands up
Im plugged with tyrant the number seven comes in sight
for the simple fact I tried ta save a pregnant womans life
Then i saw the Life Gun Shots are Fired its over Now
its grim and morbid Im mauled, my Heart under pressure
in the dimest torment She fall, asleep on the stretcher
my brothers sighin', and in the corner my mothers cryin
my last vision was him leavin the lady stuck and the baby

[Kurios™]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...99#post5363699
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=319768

:Links Up:

[Butt Faggot]

Not bad shit. Lyrical storytellers are the best kinda mc's, and shit like this is dope. What was the inspiration for this rhyme?

[Kurios™]

An Bankrobber Killed an Preganet Women an Yr Ago while my Momz was in da Same Bank Uppin^

[thewisemanez]

That's some crazy shyt man, how ya moms was in that bank... but the story was good and it flowed type water-like. really liked the flow.

[Roca J]

Kool story. you had some sick flow here and there throughout
good topic. interesting. you also had good rhymes.
good structure and imagery and i followed this whole peice
good job. keep it up.

[Kurios™]

Nyce Feed Back on All tho... Thanx Alot Bru

[X-Trapper]

You had a tight flow on this, props on this, this piece was aiight, you had a nice story teeling type flow goin` through it. Its like one of those first view kinda` shit, I like that in this story. The lyrical abilities was alright to me, but I am still a newbie to this shit, trying to up my game. Your vocabulary is weak in this, jump on that shit asap, trust me, the more word syou know, the better your flow will get, trust me on this. It had an believeable setting to it, so I like that also, keep droppin` shit, aiight. 7/10 for its realism.

[E-TO-THA-T]

thats fresh dude hit some of my battles up and why r u retire for a lil while?